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Dion's New Slave
Author: Roxxi
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(Added on Jul 8, 2008)
(This month 55236 readers) (Total 69535 readers) |
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I, Roxxi, am tortured by my loving master and LOVING every minute of it |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
ukMasterC
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Jul 17, 2008 |
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Too short, too much happening too quickly, felt like a summary more than a story. Could do with expanding the story with dialogue. Look forward to reading more of your work hopefully it will be longer and with dialogue. (5/10)
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masterdw
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Jul 14, 2008 |
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Doesn't she have parents? (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
blossom
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Jul 14, 2008 |
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i`ve never seen a story go so fast i was gutted when i got to the end, apart from that it sounds good (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
slut2002gyrl
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Jul 12, 2008 |
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hot ideas, but please slow down and develope them more deeply. how about some dialogue? write again, keep in those hot elements, but let us savor and juice as we read. (6/10)
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