|
|
|
|
|
Mom's the Boss
Author: Pallidan
|
| |
(Added on Jun 7, 2005)
(This month 61616 readers) (Total 74560 readers) |
| |
A young couple mothers get into a fight with the winner dominating the other and then controlling the couple new life. A lucky guy in the end. |
| Ratings and Reviews: |
| Number
of Ratings: 7 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
| 1 |
2 |
3 |
4 |
5 |
6 |
7 |
8 |
9 |
10 |
| 14% |
0% |
0% |
0% |
29% |
29% |
14% |
14% |
0% |
0% |
|
Weighed
Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
| Average
Rating: (5.5/10) |
Highest
Rating:  (8/10) |
Lowest
Rating:  (1/10) |
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
glib24
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Aug 14, 2012 |
| |
Fun read despite the numerous technical flaws in the storytelling. (6/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
mkemse
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jan 6, 2008 |
| |
1 thing i have noticedwithyour writting, thr story is either very well written or realf bad , no middle ground (7/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
rebelfan1
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Aug 4, 2005 |
| |
Pallidan continues to post the same plot over and over again. His/her writing and gramatical skills are below a grammer school level. Please learn how to write or find someone to edit your stories. Otherwise, stop posting them because there actually get in the way of searching for good stories. (1/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jun 14, 2005 |
| |
Some great ideas and an original story line but it's nearly impossible to follow with this many Moms You need to give them names and call them by thier names throughout the story. An occasional use of quotation marks would help too. (6/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
tamiesplayhouse
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jun 10, 2005 |
| |
I enjoed this when will the next chapers come (8/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
lex ludite
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jun 8, 2005 |
| |
There is a lot of very good material here, but the total lack of editing kills it for this reader. I would suggest that the author, who has enough imagination for two, find a partner to do the dirty work of turning his fractured and tortured prose into something readable. I also suggest that in turn for this critical assistance, the new partner receive formal recognition either as coauthor or is acknowledged for their editing contribution. Until something like this happens, my rating is about all your work will ever receive from this reader, which is a damned shame considering your overactive imagination, and ability to generate a high level of heat. (5/10)
|
|
|
About 