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Caught stealing
Author: Jan Wright
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(Added on Sep 13, 2000)
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Caught stealing and punished. |
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Average (?):  (2.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Dec 31, 2003 |
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anyone have a story road map to find your way through the story?
No need to finish what is not started (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
Neopadinski
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Oct 18, 2003 |
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Ow...I can already tell this review is going to hurt.<br>First off, what I could understand (i.e., the grammar/spelling/punctuation was decipherable) was terrible. I mean, the story's actual plot is ok. A girl gets caught for stealing two grand, and to avoid several years in jail she has three weekend sex-sessions with the guy that caught her. Unfortunately, by the time you realize what is happening at the current moment, the author has already had something else happen. Then again, it might just seem that the concepts leap from one to another, considering the lack of quotation marks, commas, periods...etc. <br>And where is the detail? Essentially, the story was on this level:<br>He tied me up. He gagged me. you will be quiet he said. i was scared. he put a leash on me. come with me he said. then he lead me somewhere. where are you taking me i asked. <br>You get the idea. Like I said, it's a good concept. However, some of the plot elements could be deleted, and A LOT could be added to the existing plot elements.
Here's an ending that I'm sure everyone will agree fits the rest of the story:
then he died and we were set free yay i said. THE END (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Odette |
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Sep 17, 2000 |
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It is missing some spices... conclusion, it was boring (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
master mc spooge |
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Sep 16, 2000 |
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this story really needs lots of work, boring!!! (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
ABrunetteWoman |
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Sep 14, 2000 |
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Oh dear. I don't believe I just read this stupid story. I won't mention the punctuation, because there wasn't any, and the....what's the point ?
A story that should never have been written, let alone finished. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
hyphen666 |
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Sep 13, 2000 |
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Why bother posting such a short, weak, unoriginal piece of fluff on the site? Why would anyone want to finish such tripe? (2/10)
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