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Miss Annabelles
Author: Master_Ecstasy
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(Added on Dec 27, 2011)
(This month 33558 readers) (Total 48139 readers) |
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A girls new school, slave training at its best. |
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| Reviewer:
neededcritic
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Mar 25, 2016 |
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Posting something this short (less than 2 pages) is pointless. Write at least a full chapter before posting.
This gets a 1 for "Very poor in content".
Additionally, he spammed content codes that don't exist in the story for more views. Honestly, if you don't have at least 5 pages of material don't post it. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Aug 18, 2012 |
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As grinner666 has mentioned the plot is unrealistic. Some background as to why people are made slaves at the age of sixteen would be beneficial. I would also like to know if it is only girls who are slaves or is it for ethnic/class/colour/financial reasons? (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mright
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Jan 23, 2012 |
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keep going I am liking it so far. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
grinner666
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Jan 2, 2012 |
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This was a decent start to what might become a very good story. I think JimmyJump's complaint, while he never bothered to actually critique the piece, is that the attitude of the protagonist is ... to say the least ... unrealistic, unless she's been brainwashed to look forward to a life of slavery basically since birth, in which case the author should have given us some kind of story hint that that's the case.
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Besides this (admittedly large) character motivation issue, the story is well written and I look forward to seeing at least a few more chapters, to see whether the author ever addresses that issue. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Dec 28, 2011 |
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Seems like the "author" is the same age as his main character.
Master Ecstacy should be urgently contacted by the people from Encyclopedia Britannica, because he managed to fit several volumes of potential material into a six kilobite file.
At least, when he starts on the Encyclopedia Britannica, he only has to copy existing text, instead of coming up with his own. That would be a relief.
JJ (2/10)
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