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Heretics
Author: Alix
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(Added on Dec 26, 2011)
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Two girls are about to experiece a life changing ordeal. |
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Average (?):  (5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Major Littmann
(Edit) |
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Dec 27, 2011 |
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I feel the incorrect word use and strange punctuation tend to mask the fact that this isn't much of a story, neither the plot nor the background to the plot are properly explained or even thought through, and the descriptions are pedestrian and plodding and as a result it is far from erotic. (4/10)
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- Replied by:
Alix
(Edit) (Dec 28, 2011)
- Thanks for your input Major.
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Dec 26, 2011 |
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Must agree with Lisa Jones, in that there's way too many homophone errors in "Heretics" to make for a comfortable read.
Quite a few spelling errors too, I'm afraid, like "server" instead of "severe" etc. .
The story itself is well written and has potential, just get everything through an editor before posting, please.
JJ (6/10)
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- Replied by:
Alix
(Edit) (Dec 28, 2011)
- Sorry, never heard of a homophone mate; bit above the old pay level.
The spelling went through WORD(spell check), I see your point with server and severe; and that would anoy me too, so I'll have to work on it.
Prefer to try with my own editing, but a valid point so thanks for making it.
Thanks for your time Jimmy and your response.
- Replied by:
JimmyJump
(Edit) (Dec 28, 2011)
- Homophone is "self-sounding", or, words which sound the same but are written differently and have a different meaning (there/their, brake/break, deer/dear, etc. ...)
Okay, let me get off of my orange crate now...
And hey! at least you still get paid, which could change after you start using homonyms or even onomatopoeia *grin*
JJ
- Replied by:
Alix
(Edit) (Jan 14, 2012)
- Thanks :)
I'm with you, cheers.
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| Reviewer:
Lisa Jones
(Edit) |
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Dec 26, 2011 |
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Please, please, find yourself an editor. There are so many homophone errors - their/there being the main culprit - and it takes away from what could be a promising start. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
Alix
(Edit) (Dec 28, 2011)
- Thanks Lisa for your input and your time. See my reply to Jimmy for homophone :)
You and Jimmy think there is something in the story and so do I.I shall go over part two and see what I can come up with/edit. I'm not in your class, your good; I'm just doing something that i thought i could never do(write), that doesn't mean I can but what the hell, I'll give it a whirl.
Thanks for your time and input Lisa, cheers.
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