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The Ayurvedic Treatment
Author: Critical Mass
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(Added on Jun 11, 2011)
(This month 27342 readers) (Total 35746 readers) |
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A girl gets a letter from her fiancée, a letter that reveals hi fantasy, and she sets out on a journey to prepare herself for the wedding .... to transform herself into the fantasy of her fiancée ... |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
scottishgent
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Jul 17, 2011 |
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A wonderful story that describes the modification of a young woman using natural methods. I envy the man who will receive this woman as his bride. (9/10)
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AniYasha
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Jun 16, 2011 |
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I personally think that this story was actually quite well done so far. The writing is good; I didn't notice any glaring spelling or grammar issues. The main character so far in the first chapter in my opinion lacks a little depth as the only reason we have for her undergoing her transformation is that she got an email from her fiancé. It seems as though she might have had an argument or two, but even if she was interested in this fate for herself, surely after undergoing a few of the procedures she might start to have doubts. I would encourage the author to add some detail into the characters mind and her feelings about what is happening to her. The description of her transformation and the techniques and methods are superb and the author’s ideas are interesting. This is much better than the usual hand waving of 'surgery'. This reader hopes that the story will grow much longer as we watch the girl's continued change and hopefully watch her doubts with herself and her changes grow. (8/10)
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