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Miss Boss Man
Author: PaddleMePlease
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(Added on May 30, 2011)
(This month 9530 readers) (Total 10468 readers) |
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Work in progress! Really I've just submitted the story, to see if my writting has some potentiale... But story is about a man, and a girl, obviously ;) He's a Dom, she doesn't know she's a sub or what goes on in his "club"..... |
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Average (?):  (4/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Jun 1, 2011 |
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Well that is a first, i just could not finish this piece of writing as it did not seem to make sense. As PieterM says it seems to be written in code.
There are some spelling errors, or at least i think they are, but they could be part of the code. Oh yes what owner is going to keep someone who drops two bottles of $300 booze? Sorry that is too silly. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
lsue21
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May 31, 2011 |
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probably makes sense in the authors mind, but not on paper. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
PieterM
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May 30, 2011 |
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It seems to be written in code and all the characters speak in the same strange jargon, what the hell is an eve? and speech marks are used in the wrong places and not in the right places and it's horriby difficut to know who is talking.
Nothing worth the description of action actually happened. I await developments. (7/10)
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