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Sarah Naked In School - Extended Version
Author: Thomas Chaser
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(Added on Apr 8, 2011)
(This month 51199 readers) (Total 60641 readers) |
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Sarah is forced to go nude in high school for a week, and becomes the talk of the town. She's stripped, humiliated, and almost raped, but in the end she learns the true meaning of love and the value of foregiveness. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Severe
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Nov 14, 2011 |
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So, this story is very well written and has good flow, but it drags on for a long time with its plot and characters without delivering any significant conflict, the premise it's named after is abandoned about halfway through, and Sarah's tendency to wield her power like a cudgel whenever she's got it both kill the submissive vibe and make it really hard to like Sarah in general. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Apr 12, 2011 |
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i am in something of a quandary, i have read both this story and its shorter version. The problem is there are things that i like in both versions that do not appear in both.
The shorter story tends to be choppy in its style, one would almost think it is the authors notes to himself (albeit lengthy notes). Whilst this version has a much better flow to it.
In the shorter version there is a night class where Sarah is used as a model in how police officers should best control a person. Personnally i liked that scene and with a bit more fleshing out think it should have been kept. However there are no night classes in this story and i am not sure how one could keep this scene without changing drastically the evenings with the female coach.
This story does deal much better with how come Sarah and Thomas merge the two farms. But i think the Metal Shop scene is rather a waste of space, other than Sarah seems to use it to buy herself some free time.
One thing i did find confusing was why did so many of the females willingly want to wear the prison uniform? Now that is kink i have never come across before ....... police and nurses uniforms but never prisoners, ahh well it takes all sorts as they say.
The only real complaint i have about this story is its length without chapters/divisions. i am currently off work with a very lengthy disability, but even i could not find the time to read this story in one sitting. A few inset headings or better still submitted seperate chapters would have helped me find my place more quickly.
Well to sum up, a well thought out and written story with excellent characterizations and plenty of clear detail as to uniform/food/setting/action. Thank you Oh Great Author for a really good read. i hope there will be a follow on story, she still has a penal farm to run and a piano to win! (10/10)
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