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Wendy's Test
Author: Abe
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(Added on Mar 16, 2011)
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Wendy is working her way through school as a sex object, but she doesn't want to lose her viginity, so... |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
saxman66
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The problem I found was the huge degree of suspension of belief required. I could have taken Wendy being used to becoming a pain slut if forced into it for a period, despite her religious beliefs. However the idea that an entire sorority is a group of whores and obtains new members by basically having them raped at a brothel is so stupid. If they were very careful about how they selected their girls that might just be believable, espeically possibly aided by some local corruption meaning a lot of authorities turning a blind eye. However with this virtually random selection of girls you're bound to have someone object, probably pretty soon.
Similarly with Wendy being selected, unless you assume that Bronwyn really hates her sister, it would make more sense for her to cautiously warn her away from that sorority. If for no other reason that to protect the sororities secrets from her devout sister.
I had a quick skim through the rest of the story but while some interesting ideas the basic plot flaw meant I couldn't take it seriously. The joke from Mrs. Schultz "I'll not have
my girls abused by perverts" raised a bit of half hearted humour.
As I say, while not impossible that Wendy could develop the path displayed of becoming a pain slut and directing her sexual desires that way I think it highly unlikely. What I see as impossible is that they could assemble girls in such a haphazard way and have any hope of getting away with it.
Saxman66 (6/10)
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Michael247
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High high marks for the pain slut sex scenes. ESPECIALLY the "pony cart"!
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With Wendy's test we are treated to a smorgasborg of sexual depravity that gradually increases in severity until we finally arrive at a phenomenal climax of sexual deviance. The author, Abe does an excellent job of taking a rather unbelievable set of circumstances (that of a sorority being nothing but a group of high dollar whores) and making the plot action so vivid and so engaging that the believability issues become immaterial. Besides, what HAPPENS to poor little Wendy is totally believable and quite creative.
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The primary complaint I have is with the formatting. Everything was squeezed in to a single column. While there were still paragraph breaks, the single column made reading a bit tiresome. From a grammatical perspective the story was well written, though it felt choppy. I can't even really pinpoint a particular issue. It was like chopping wood, rather than using a chain saw. Both are effective, but one does a smoother job. I didn't notice anything out of place or odd. Even the spots where new dialog is established is generally from unnamed sources and carry through the previous paragraph. So all in all, no complaints.
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I have to take a moment to applaud the "pony" scene. This was absolutely fantastic. I loved the "breast harness" and the progression of torments, even accidental ones, as the pad between Wendy's legs is lost and the silk rope digs upward into her sex. This is just rich. That was practically the climax for me right there. Okay.. I admit it. It WAS the climax for me. In fact, maybe this story SHOULD have been a two parter. Who knows?
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As an author of another "sorority" story, I love these college collection of slutty girls. I'd love to put together a "virtual campus" with members of the Margaret Sanger Sorority and my own Sigma Epsilon Xi interacting on occasion. It would be fascinating!
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Now that I mention Margaret Sanger, I have to wonder why the author chose to name the sorority after the founder of Planned Parenthood. Her primary philosophy was one held by many political liberals and conservatives today: that a woman needs to have control of when she becomes pregnant. Of course there are differing opinions on how and WHEN that control should be exercised, but author Abe stays far away from that controversy. So why choose Margaret Sanger? Beats me.
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Another thing I want to point out is the amazing plot device the author constructed with his "Roman Coliseum" imaginations. Throughout the story, Wendy is able to not only endure humiliating rape and in the end brutal painful sexual acts, by imagining herself a "Christian" being abused by Roman pagan soldiers in the Coliseum. Honestly, I wish the author had expanded on this in fact. It would have been even cooler had we gotten DETAILED descriptions of the Roman rapes, especially in counterpoint to some of the earlier escapades, just as he did for the "crucifixion" scene. But that said, the plot device of explaining WHY Wendy was able to accept the punishing torments was so well done that I was impressed.
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My only last complaint (and it really isn't a writing complaint) is that Wendy sticks to this silly "I made an oath to stay a virgin!" thing. Granted, it is this oath and her choice to remain a vaginal virgin that promotes her to accept all the brutal punishment. But I would have loved a different ending scene where rather than finding a sugar daddy willing to accept her unusual requirements concerning sex, she was forced to open herself up to vaginal penetration, thus shattering her self-martyr image, only to discover she LOVED fucking. Oh well.
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In summary there was just too many things going for this story to rate anything lower than a nine. The choppiness I felt was certainly overloaded by the phenomenal character, the great plot device, the fantastic build-up in sexual tension, and a writing style that appealed to me.
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Yours Faithfully, Michael Alexander
(www.michaelalexanderstories.com) (9/10)
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