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The Discovery of My Submissiveness
Author: cuntpuppy
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(Added on Nov 3, 2010)
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Laura discovers she is born to be a sex slave at a very young age. This is the story of her journey into the humilislut she so longed to be all her life. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
lilyann19
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Nov 17, 2011 |
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Very good, couldn't stop thinking about it while in school had to rub my legs together just to keep calm (9/10)
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MidnightMagic88
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May 7, 2011 |
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I love this story... I actually love both of your stories. However, there is one or two things about this story that are currently turning me off, otherwise I'd give it a 10 instead of a 9. If you did away with these two things, you'd have one hell of a story here. First, I can't say I'm a big fan of the imaginary 'voice' Master. It was fine in the beginning, and realistic, because I know from personal experience, I was the same way at that age, but now that she has found alternatives, she doesn't really need it anymore, and her own willpower should be enough. She doesn't need to pretend her voice is telling her to do those things anymore. Secondly, I love what she has going with Alan. I believe those two are really in love, and I am actually rooting FOR them as a couple, long term, like I would ship any couple that I enjoyed in a movie or T.V. series. For their sake, and Alan's, I really hope that Laura has the good sense to put and end to all communication with that online creep. It feels like she's cheating on Alan with him, and Alan's been working so hard to please her the way she craves. He desserves better, and I hope she realizes that soon. I also think Alan is progressing very nicely as a new Master. He'll be a pro in no time. Please keep the updates coming. This story is nowhere near finished in my eyes. You could make this a series if you wanted to! Keep up the great work!
P.S. I hope my comments do not offend you. In the end it is your story to write in whichever way you please, but I hope that my constructive criticism will help you in some way. Thank you again for the amazing read! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
kuntpuppy
(Edit) (May 8, 2011)
- Thank you very much for the review. I appreciate it. Yes, i agree with you in the sense that the voice needs to go. Like i said, it is a true story about myself and my own sexual discoveries. The voice stayed with me for a short while longer. I always knew it was myself telling me to do all those things, but the voice made it someone else. Anyway, two more chapters and the voice will fade off. The reason I am taking so long to update is because I need to post three chapters. I dont want to spoil the story for you, but something tragic happens in my life and i want to get to where things get better before i post anything so my readers aren't left angry or sad or anything.
I always appreciate criticism. I know there's no way to satisfy everyone, but I am never ever offended by comments or suggestions.
thank you once again.
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MidnightMagic88
(Edit) (May 8, 2011)
- Please, take your time!! You think J.K. Rowling wrote the Harry Potter series in a day? Haha. Good hard work takes time. As a fellow writer, I can appreciate that. However, I wanted to let you know that after reading your story, I have been inspired to start writing for publication myself. Up until now, I just write for fun, but have never published my work anywhere. And after you said that the story was based on your own life, I realized I have my own story to tell -- even though most of the story is 'unwritten' in real life, I guess this could be the perfect opportunity to live out my fantasies until they do become reality. Thank you for the inspiration! And once again, I am very much looking forward to reading the rest of yours. :)
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lydia3140
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Mar 30, 2011 |
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I really enjoyed this story and wait for more chapters. Well written,keeps the readers interest,just all round everything you would ask for in a story of this type. (10/10)
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erem1s
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Feb 21, 2011 |
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Good and getting better. It's nice seeing a somewhat slow -- but not too slow -- buildup in her actions if not her mentality; shows a contrast between her real personality and age, and the Mysterious Inner Voice. (8/10)
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Curtis
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Feb 19, 2011 |
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With Part Three this is getting better. Any more improvement will make me bump you up a grade. By the way, I like what you're doing with the 'other person' living inside her head.
EDIT: Some odd word choices ('lied' for 'lay' or 'laid', etc.) and a few 'wrong word' misspellings, but really getting interesting. The last half of part four and all of five have an entirely different feel from what went before. It seems like it's becoming less of a D&S story and more of a love story. Still, I'm enjoying it. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
kuntpuppy
(Edit) (Feb 20, 2011)
- Thank you for your rating. I know I do need some improvement with my grammar, but I am just doing this for fun. This new update was actually supposed to have part 6 and 7 with it. I didn't want it to be too long so I broke it up. Like the title, it's a story about my discovery into my submissive side and my journey into the lifestyle from a young age. As the chapters come along, it will become more intense.
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Curtis
(Edit) (Mar 25, 2011)
- I want to thank you for providing such lengthy updates. I never have to worry about being shortchanged when I see this story appear in the Library updates. The story is progressing nicely. I like the way it feels.
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Curtis
(Edit) (Mar 25, 2011)
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chromedome11
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Feb 8, 2011 |
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I enjoyed your story very much. There are a few minor grammatical errors ("your" sometimes should be "you're"), but none serious.
To me, the story is better because you jumped right into the action. Too often, stories that start out slowly are not read.
I definitely agree with your intro -- people are born gay (and submissive), not made. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
kuntpuppy
(Edit) (Feb 9, 2011)
- Thank you for the rating. I was afraid that I was taking the story to slowly and it might have been boring my readers. The next updates should be up soon and things are getting even better.
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dssmmaster
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Jan 21, 2011 |
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I like to story overall. Keep on writing. (9/10)
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JimmyJump
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Dec 2, 2010 |
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Good story. Could have been 'better' should cuntpuppy have provided a build-up, instead of jumping in at the deep end, which gives us two, three paragraphs of intro before we are being confronted with yet another prefabricated fuckslut.
The language used also doesn't match Laura's age. Way too mature sounding, which takes away from Laura's persona by making her indistinguishable from any other two-dimensional character from any other two-dimensional story.
In other words --and although Laura's thoughts and actions are interesting, to say the least-- she's flat and uninspired.
Like in so many other stories that take off like a Sidewinder rocket, it is hard to maintain the tension throughout, because, when starting at the peak of the action, there's no other way to go but down. Or, getting repetitive after a short while.
Nice effort, like I said, but with lots of room for improvement. Well, maybe not improvement, but rather refinement.
JJ (7/10)
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