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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
loki325
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Oct 11, 2010 |
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It is a good start but the story needs a re-write. There is no psychological element to this story that makes it compelling. Avoid cliches and try to make it interesting. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
TuftyTrue
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Oct 11, 2010 |
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This is a re-print from ealier in the year. All background, but no story. Would be good if it moved forward a bit more!! (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 8, 2010 |
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Cute little vignette, which caught my attention because of the odd nom-de-plume.
What bothers me in this kind of story (besides the male sub thing --but I won't let that interfere with my rating) is the fact that the author --who seems to be a fan of some "Pluto Femina Empire"-- doesn't bother in the least to explain, just a tiny bit, what that so-called "Empire" is all about.
Even the folks who add to the series of "NIS" (naked In School) or other fanbased stories, take their time to tell the unsuspecting reader what it's all about.
Now, I as a reader am confronted with a very short text describing two airheads who do something nasty to a bald dude.
Okay, the short is well-written, but that doesn't mean it was a great ride. For that "Lakeesha And Brittany" is too short and too vague and too rushed like in too-too-I-hear-a-train-coming...
Writing skills are okay, communactive skills below freezing point, whatever scale-division you're using.
JJ (6/10)
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