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Future Shocked
Author: Ayla Jaxxon
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(Added on Feb 14, 2009)
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A young woman is kidnapped and taken to a futuristic land as a sex slave. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
Average
Rating:  (9.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Mar 14, 2011 |
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Like prn.surfer and Naughtybdsmgirl i am giving this a nine because of its sudden ending. i do appreciate that the author's reason for ending the story as she does, but it left me feeling a bit lost.
A word of warning dear Ayla Jaxxon, spell check only corrects a wrong spelling and not the wrong word. So there unfortunately a few typos, however they do not ruin the flow of the story.
By the way do the nanobots work on male slaves as well? Orgasm denial is a real turn on for me - it is making me hot and bothered just thinking abouit it. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
prn.surfer
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Mar 2, 2009 |
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A VERY well-written story. If this is indeed your first attempt at writing, you have passed with flying colors! :) . While not high on the arousal quotient (in my opinion), the sheer detail and thought that has obviously gone into this still make it a worthwhile read. The only reason I did not give it a 10 was because of the abrupt ending. As you said, the story could have gone any number of ways - instead, you were taking us through an account of the protagonist's training, and suddenly, it's six months later and everything's settled down.
Still, Kudos! (9/10)
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Elphaba_The_Wicked
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Feb 28, 2009 |
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By far one of the best written stories on this site. Please write more. (10/10)
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littleone_
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Feb 19, 2009 |
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WOW! I just finished chapter three and I'm hooked. I like the length of what Jaxxon has sent, it keeps my interest. There are some jarring typos in the story but it is still totally amazing. With some good editing this story would easily be worth a rating of 10, and even way beyond that.
I'm so hooked on the main character, Ayla Jaxxon. I mean like I AM Ayla when I'm reading this story and actually Ayla is thinking my thoughts; or maybe I'm thinking hers. This is one of the few storied here that I am totally sure was written by a women. No man could ever get inside the Characters mind like the author does. My thanks go out to the author for giving me such a wonderful story that so aroused (Yeah, I got hot and wet just reading it. OMG, did I really just say that?)and entertained me. (9/10)
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sadistico
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Feb 17, 2009 |
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I love this Story. Very well written. Plaese, write more. Good Characters.
Greetings
sadistico (10/10)
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ariel emms
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Feb 16, 2009 |
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when i first read chapter one (ok, full disclosure, i know ayla, she gave me this to read months ago) it scared me SO much, but i couldn't stop reading even though my heart dropped to the pit of my stomach in fear. it is so compelling, so real, and it has something for everyone - the sheer physicality of the bondage, so well-captured, but also just incredible insight into the submissive mind. ayla inspires me - quite literally. she's not only in most of my stories, but the way i wrote them was affected by what i learned by reading her chapters as they came along. big hugs, ayla!!! (10/10)
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Naughtybdsmgirl
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Feb 16, 2009 |
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I read the entire thing in one sitting and I find it quite hard to get my mind out of the story. The ONLY reason I did not give it a ten was because it ended. I encourage you to make this a longer series with the same characters. I would have loved to read about how Alya was now entrusted with going to the store. I would also like to read about more characters and their interactions together. (9/10)
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JimmyJump
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Feb 16, 2009 |
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Gulliver meets Baron Munchhausen while wandering inside a draft of the screenplay for "Virtuosity".
Very well written with great character build.
Well done, Ayla.
JJ (9/10)
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- Replied by:
ariel emms
(Edit) (Feb 16, 2009)
- oh Jimmy, i'm so glad you like her stories too! when i first read the line "she called me ayla" - ooh, it gave me chills, it gives me chills now! it just captured so succinctly and so beautifully that internal conflict of reluctant submission.
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Icemaiden
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Feb 15, 2009 |
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WOW great I felt like I was the captive !!! Really liked the capture, hunt and restrint elements.
A 10+ Hope you post more stories. (10/10)
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