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Service to the Queen
Author: Four Letters
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(Added on Jan 28, 2009)
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A slave is ensnared by the voluptuous Cleopatra, Queen of the Nile. He endures the training of a goddess, |
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| Reviewer:
GoddessSpenser
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Feb 3, 2009 |
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verry goood but could afford to expand on the details more (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
sheila09
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Feb 3, 2009 |
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Excellent! great writing, interesting story...like the character development so far! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
StephVE
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Feb 2, 2009 |
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An excellant story rich in descriptive detail. The images of the female slaves kept nude in the garden are very vivid. The description of Cleopatra is excellant. The story has good pace and should be expanded into an erotic thriller. In later chapters perhaps the nude female slaves will row the royal galley. In the nude of course! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
StephVE
(Edit) (Feb 10, 2009)
- Reading the story has great promise. Cleopatra is both beautiful and insatiable. An entire chapter could be devoted to the slave's training under the lash to provide more copious semen. The slave would be milked several times a day by beautifully skilled nude "hand maidens". Over days and weeks he would be trained to produce enough semen to bathe the queen's bountiful breasts.
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StephVE
(Edit) (Feb 17, 2009)
- The author has great talent in describing Cleopatra's fabulous bod as well as the torture chambers of the palace. The interplay is well developed and the secenario's of the Queeen of the Nile training a new male slave are realistic. After three chapters the story is phenomenol with a great mix of sex. splendor and the riches of Cleopatra. I can't wait for more
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StephVE
(Edit) (Mar 3, 2009)
- A marvelous fourth chapter. The description of the hand maidens training David are wonderful. The idea of milking him and then punishing him is sure to produce results. The story is well crafted and very well written. Great descriptions of the female staff and their assets
I can't wait for the rest of the novel
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StephVE
(Edit) (Mar 19, 2009)
- The story has a great ending. Overall the story captures to eroticism and grandeur of Cleopatra's court. It is well executed and highly descriptive. One of the best stories on the site
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| Reviewer:
shoeps
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Feb 2, 2009 |
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Very good story!Set in ancient egypt times!Hopefully there will be a sequel!Maybe you tell us about the punishment in the dungeon .Perhaps David would become a labour slave on the Queens galleys ......Would be great!
Thank you for your work!
best regards
Christian (9/10)
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