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a ponys life
Author: sandrax
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(Added on Dec 17, 2008)
(This month 12598 readers) (Total 24630 readers) |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Feb 2, 2009 |
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Though I agree, to an extent, with what bracemaiden and ElectricBadger have said, I still feel this is extremely well written. Don't have no quarrels with punctuation either.
Okay, so maybe chopping-up the tale into a couple of paragraphs might make the reading easier, but "A Pony's Life" is so short, that the entirity could as easily be one paragraph.
Also, I don't see the need to grant only 5 points because of these minor flaws.
I think you did more than OK, sandrax.
JJ (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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Dec 24, 2008 |
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The thought process is there, but the writer's fear of punctuation and capitalization is an obstacle my interest could not overcome. Basic work should be done before expanding this vignette. (5/10)
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ElectricBadger
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Dec 20, 2008 |
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Lots of promise - a great scenario and good ideas, and terrific emotion - but needs mechanical work, spelling, capitalization, format. Would also help to expand it a bit and go into a bit more detail about the situation; felt a little rushed. A great job, though, and I really appreciate that you shared it! (5/10)
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