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Lynn
Author: Tim Looper
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(Added on Apr 23, 2008)
(This month 29128 readers) (Total 53373 readers) |
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Professional Theripist/Dominatrix takes her own full time slave girl |
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Average (?):  (5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Mar 13, 2010 |
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I like the story but it is spoilt by lack of editing especially over the spellings - it is not that the words are mispelt but are the wrong word entirely (ie: "she put a color around her neck".
having said all this lets have some more on these charaters. (5/10)
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azrlg17
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Apr 27, 2008 |
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The story should be at least twice as long for the amount of information in it. All the sex acts are much too short and done in one or two sentences. Almost no thoughts or feelings. Also it is hard to read since there are almost no paragraphs. And why does Ann go to such a trouble with the bondage poker game if she doesn't keep to the rules anyway? Why not just overpower her victim and have her sign the papers?
Spelling is poor. (4/10)
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schoolboylv
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Apr 26, 2008 |
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Some spelling errors, get someone to edit and you have a 10 (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
pmhants
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Apr 25, 2008 |
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The story turned me on, but the relatively high number of spelling mistakes somewhat impacted my enjoyment, sorry! (4/10)
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