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The Cruel Game of Backgammon
Author: Ashley Zacharias
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(Added on Feb 29, 2008)
(This month 24600 readers) (Total 49451 readers) |
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A woman plays backgammon on the Internet, imposing a physical penalty for herself if she loses. Her friend helps her punish herself. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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andrewa
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May 19, 2015 |
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Well written story that is well worth a read.
The characters where rather believable, but some actions would have needed to be clarified in the history of the characters. The descriptions of the events are detailed enough to give you a good idea about what is going on, but not so much as to feel like the author is trying to corral your fantasies in to a box. It can get a bit preachy at times on how relationships work or should work, but that is negligible.
Over all the well balanced descriptions of the visuals and the interesting characters makes this a very pleasant experience. (9/10)
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MarginallyTruePig
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Jan 2, 2011 |
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After discovering Ashley thanks to her Private Performance story, I had to check her other works. I was delighted to discover that even her first story was absolutely great and closer to my tastes than many stories on this site.
Mostly everything is fine here too: the somewhat realistic setting and penalties, the writing, the characters, etc. I especially liked that the third envelope had not been opened.
One minor issue: I would have expected Craig to sport a hard-on several times during the penalties, and while certainly faithful to his wife, to have had some thoughts about his relationships while helping Leslie. (10/10)
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Mandy001
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Nov 7, 2008 |
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I thought I had reviewed this one, but on looking further I realised I hadn't. I have to admit that I'm taken by self bondage and punishment, this is one that got my juices flowing. You have done well Ashley, Congratulations (9/10)
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Curtis
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Apr 28, 2008 |
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Didn't realize I hadn't reviewed this one yet. In the extremely limited genre of wager/forfeit stories, "Nobody does it better/Makes me feel sad for the rest…" (10/10)
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Mist
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Mar 30, 2008 |
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beautiful story and hope there is a part 2! (9/10)
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ElectricBadger
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Mar 14, 2008 |
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Well written, nice characters and a good situation. I'd love to see the plot develop a bit more in future installments, and personally I liked that we didn't see #3 yet...it gives someplace to go, I hope -- though I'd love to find out what was in there someday, perhaps in a future game?
It was also interesting to see the topping-from-the-bottom scenario unfold, and the fairly uninvolved involvement of her friend. A bit of a strange situation that makes for a good fantasy - though I hope he (or someone else) will step up with something unexpected in the future...would be lovely to see her reaction to a bit of chaos.
Thanks for writing, I look forward to your next submission! (9/10)
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drflotsom
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Mar 13, 2008 |
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Quite well done. Writing was tight and descriptive. (9/10)
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Snark
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Mar 8, 2008 |
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Nicely done! Excellant pacing, thank you for proper spelling, grammer, punctuation and all the necessary tools of a proper writer. Well descripted with excellant anticipation. I'll wait for the next chapters with anxious anticipation. (10/10)
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DarkPen
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Mar 8, 2008 |
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Excellent writing, excellent action. Shows a good knowledge of what real pain is like and was very hot without being over the top.
Great read -- and I too would like to see another backgammon loss.
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tenfour
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Mar 7, 2008 |
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Excellent characters. Believable and very hot. Would love to see another chapter. (9/10)
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Sara5
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Mar 6, 2008 |
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Very good story Ashley. I was captured from the start, and the characters were expertly drawn. I have never played backgammon, but I can tell you have. The enfolding sessions were very good, testing both Leslie and her non-bdsm friend.
Please write more stories! (9/10)
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doctor9
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Mar 4, 2008 |
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While this was very well done, I had thought it would have been much better if the woman had made a mistake and put the wrong number on the envelop or had put one or more of the wrong smaller envelops in the larger one, thus breaking the flow of what she had thought was going to happen to her. But otherwise it was very well written and I hope to see more chapters from this author. (9/10)
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pangent617
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Mar 4, 2008 |
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I enjoy this type of writing and look forward to more of the same. I find that there is an escalation in sequels here. One can only hope for such a sequel to this story (9/10)
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AlphaBeta
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Mar 3, 2008 |
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Wow! Great story. Excellent writing and especially good characterization, but a fast plot and plenty of heat. I recommend this to anyone, and I'd love to read more by this author. (10/10)
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wyst1716
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Mar 3, 2008 |
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Very nicely written from the start to the end. I'm not sure if I'm more intrigued or annoyed that I didn't discover what was in the other two envelopes, but that says I was involved!
I'm looking forward to the next piece from this author. (9/10)
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mkemse
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Mar 3, 2008 |
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very orignal in concept and theme, very well done (9/10)
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kfb9_kfb99
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Mar 2, 2008 |
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Immaginitve scenario, well described. Clear imagary, good characters (9/10)
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