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The Tourist
Author: gpflorida
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(Added on Feb 29, 2008)
(This month 17380 readers) (Total 55860 readers) |
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Young Lady Accused of Stealing Is Used. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Falcon
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May 18, 2008 |
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I am giving this a 9 in spite of grammatical and spelling problems. English probably not author's native language. This story is excellent for its deliciously detailed description of a woman's body. Because she is exquisitely thin and long limbed, no detail of her anatomy escapes scrutiny by the prison officer who is subjecting her to a most protracted and nuanced humiliation for his own intense pleasure. It is as though we are there with him, first smelling her fear, then savoring the delicious aroma of her unwilling sexual response to him.
Added 5/18/08: Part 2 continues the delights of Part 1. The sexual details are marvelously spun out! Keep more chapters coming! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
usnpilot
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Mar 24, 2008 |
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Very nicely done. Keep the premise going. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
CrazedDog
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Mar 23, 2008 |
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Agree with fellatrix - looking forward to see where this goes. Has potential for some interesting control situations. (7/10)
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kemosabe
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Mar 8, 2008 |
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A spell checker would move it up to a "6" but the entire premise is beyond belief (5/10)
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alsub
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Mar 8, 2008 |
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Ok Start, but only average in my mind. Looking forward to more improvements in later chapters. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Mar 7, 2008 |
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nice start, ill be looking forward to reading more (7/10)
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- Replied by:
gpflorida
(Edit) (Mar 4, 2008)
- Thank you for taking the time to review my writing. I am pleased that you enjoyed it. I will be working on the second part. Any good ideas?
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| Reviewer:
fellatrix
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Mar 5, 2008 |
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Interesting style -- the cruelty is unusually restrained and thoughtful. i'm interested to see how it develops. (7/10)
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