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My Five New Daughters
Author: Wondering Soul
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(Added on Feb 27, 2008)
(This month 32930 readers) (Total 52605 readers) |
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Five new daughters who need protection. Who need the skills to catch a man who will take care of them and never leave them. Who better to teach them than their step father. Maybe in the end they might even see him as that man. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Jun 5, 2010 |
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These two chapters are a good opening to a long running serial (there are five girls and so far we have only been introduced to one). There are some flaws that stopped me giving a higher rating:-
******What sort of car was this that all five girls could sit on the same side of the car as him, it must be pretty wide!
******There are unfortunately quite a number of spelling errors/missed words. More proof reading would help get rid of most of these.
******Generally there is good background to the story, especially about how long he knew the mother and what happened to her. But how about a bit more about him, what does he do, how big is his house (we know it has at least 6 bedrooms), what BDSM experiance has he? Just a little info about him rounds him out to seem real.
Any way as i have already said a good start and i look forward to reading more about this family. (7/10)
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MagSgamE
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Mar 3, 2008 |
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Some parts are a bit cartoonish, but its a fun read. Keep up the good work, and I hope to read a new chapter soon! (5/10)
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dominantspecies
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Mar 2, 2008 |
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Very good story, the description of the "need" Isabelle felt was very good. It does need a bit more proof reading as there are some typos. (8/10)
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