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The Motivation Chart (Sara's Descent)
Author: jsmt
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(Added on Jan 11, 2008)
(This month 30765 readers) (Total 52030 readers) |
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Sara is a young girl starting college who dreams to be a successful professional woman. Her envisioned future seemed to be at reach but accidentally she discovers a part of her that leads her to play with fire until |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Mar 17, 2008 |
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You sure have a knack to portray some over-the-top, but believable main characters, jsmt... Very well done.
JJ (9/10)
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slut2002gyrl
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Jan 18, 2008 |
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gyrl juiced often as she read. Please write more (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
TheVariableX
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Jan 15, 2008 |
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I enjoyed your story.
I think I only stumbled over some unusual grammar two or three times at most in the entire story. Perhaps I was too deeply engrossed to notice, but then if your tale is entertaining that much thats all that counts. My stories probably end up with more spelling mistakes and cut and paste errors than that.
An all around great story following a sympathetic protagonist as she falls victim to her own dark urges and becomes her worst nightmare.
I did not find the story too unbelievable (within the context of fictional sex stories). In fact I can find an emotionally moving mostly realistic story far more chilling that an unreal tale of sex and snuff.
Keep writing and I will keep reading. (9/10)
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schoolboylv
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Jan 13, 2008 |
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I really enjoyed the start, but I think you got a bit too unrealistic with this one. I would have loved to see the initial chart drawn out a little bit longer. Wouldn't she have been able to get money a different way than pawning her stuff.
This is worth the read though! (7/10)
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