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The Quest For Jasmine Author: Bdsmaster
(Added on Dec 22, 2007) (This month 20608 readers) (Total 45234 readers)
This story is about Glenn and Jasmine and how they found each other in the most unlikely way. Lots of hardcore bdsm and sex.

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Weighed Average (?): (5.5/10)
Average Rating: (6/10)
Highest Rating: (8/10)
Lowest Rating: (2/10)

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Reviewer: Headhunteras19 (Edit) Rating: Dec 30, 2007
The idea is good, and the story line has promise, but the poor writing quality overcomes all that. Example: Why would Glenn's black captors throw him into a cul-de-sac, when they have him at the door of the house and intend to take him inside? (2/10)
Replied by: klintan100 (Edit) (Apr 9, 2010)
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Reviewer: Mad Lews (Edit) Rating: Dec 28, 2007
You certainly have your work cut out for you. It's an ambitious plan for a story that seems prepared to include every aspect of BDSM, all in one coherent thread. Best of luck with that! I will be checking in to see how you're doing and my rating may rise as you proceed.
A few things about the writing, you have a few problems with verb tenses, rereading it or reading it aloud will help you catch them. Many writers like to have a characters speech, (the stuff in quotes) start a new paragraph; and then change paragraphs when a new person talks. This just makes it easier for a reader to follow a conversation. Interestingly it makes it easier for the writer to convey a snappy verbal exchange without confusing the reader as well. Just a couple of suggestions
Yours
Mad Lews (7/10)

Reviewer: mkemse (Edit) Rating: Dec 23, 2007
nice story, love those that mix almost all the BDSM elements into one story, good job (8/10)

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