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A Vixens Demise
Author: Jon Maddux
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(Added on Dec 14, 2007)
(This month 18958 readers) (Total 36819 readers) |
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A well to do married woman is blackmailed. |
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Weighed
Average (?): (8/10) |
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Reviewer:
enjoy_me
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Dec 18, 2007 |
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This is a man who knows what to do with a woman's body. Only whores want lube so that they can enjoy the use of their mommyholes. Brilliant. (That line made me cum. Really) (9/10)
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Reviewer:
mkemse
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Dec 15, 2007 |
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what a way to start the day, i was a bit dissapointed that the chapters where so short, more detail in each would have been nice, i certainly hope you plan to add more to it (9/10)
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- Replied by:
JonMaddux
(Edit) (Dec 16, 2007)
- I submitted part 2 soon after part 1, they both posted on the same day actually! I have tried to create a story that pulls the reader in and allows him to feel as though he's watching from a corner of the room as this unfolds. Some of my previous stories i was chastised for being to detailed as they said it was confusing so i am trying to find a happy medium. I do appreciate the comments positive or negative so long as i can actually learn from them and try to do better next time (as yours were)! Please read pt 2 and let me know if it seemed to flow better.
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