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The Summer Job
Author: DoctorE
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(Added on Nov 14, 2007)
(This month 17998 readers) (Total 42123 readers) |
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Young teen gets the job of her dreams and nightmares. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Dec 22, 2007 |
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was enjoyable but adding codes to it would have made it more of a draw to a reader (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Sam Blythe
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Nov 30, 2007 |
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The story was very good. I enjoyed it immensely. However, comments about your grammatical skills are valid. I use editors myself when I can... suggest you do the same. It is much easier to read when the grammar is within the acceptable category. Keep up the stories though. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
ramses
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Nov 23, 2007 |
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Very nice story, but the lack of punctuation makes it more difficult to read. You lost points there. (6/10)
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littleone_
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Nov 23, 2007 |
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While perhaps being a bit extreme for the squeamish I found this to be a really excellent story. I could totally feel the victim’s pain. He got me so involved that I was there, I was her. Well done! There were some jarring typographical errors but a good proof reading can fix that. The story is well started and as the author develops it I am sure my rating of it will increase. I am looking forward to further chapters and I do hope they come along so I can give this author the high marks I am sure he will earn as he develops the story. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
kimmi
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Nov 21, 2007 |
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The story go to me. I liked the setup, hope you finish it (9/10)
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wolfj
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Nov 20, 2007 |
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nice phantasies (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Nov 20, 2007 |
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OK, to start with this is not a bad story concept. Now that is out of the way. I'm going to urge STRONGLY that you get an editor who can write in English. The story is so poorly written, with wrong words everywhere, punctuation reduced to the level of illiteracy, and grammar so poorly used it's not even worth commenting on.
The quality of the idea is wasted, because you will lose your readers due to the above. Find an editor, redo things, and resubmit the story. I guarantee you will get better scores... and be encouraged to continue. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
littleone_
(Edit) (Nov 23, 2007)
- Ok, his spelling, grammar and mechanics needs some work but come on, it was not that bad.
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