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Senior Diary
Author: CaptCaper
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(Added on Oct 25, 2007)
(This month 22135 readers) (Total 48620 readers) |
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The summer I turned 17, I started a diary as a writing exercise. The first couple of months were rather mundane, but things took a dramatic turn right after Labor Day. I recently came across the diary when we were settling my mother's estate. The following is extracted from that diary, edited for readability, and only slightly embellished. I'll follow up with more entries if folks like it. |
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tomp79
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Feb 11, 2012 |
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Very well written, with vivid descriptions of humiliation scenes... looking forward to more of this. (9/10)
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chromedome11
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Apr 4, 2010 |
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Enjoyed your story. Looking forward to more. (9/10)
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Wartortle
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May 15, 2008 |
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Quite good! Great story and well told. My only complaint would be that it since the characters share paragraphs during dialogue, it gets a little confusing as to who's talking. That being said, I'd love to hear more!
Also, what the heck is a love bone? (9/10)
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Sam Blythe
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Nov 11, 2007 |
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Very good. I liked how Betsy was humiliated and forced to do things against her will. I can't wait till part two to hear about what Betsy is made to do next. My only suggestion is to use the more recognized form of conversational paragraphing. Separate different people with different paragraphs so we'll more quickly figure out who's speaking. (9/10)
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steph2004ster
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Nov 7, 2007 |
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gyrl is certainly interested in further developments. she hopes for more and more humiliation and punishment. Perhaps some changes to her body that cannot be hidden, such as a piercing or tattoo, or anklet or collar, something declaring her slave to all who see her (8/10)
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ramses
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Nov 3, 2007 |
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a very promising start that leaves the reader hungry for more. (8/10)
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ouchybottom
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Oct 28, 2007 |
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Great story. Leaves you wanting more. Please tell more. Love the theme. Frame story is a nice touch. (9/10)
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tom03087
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Oct 26, 2007 |
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Well written and a great theme (9/10)
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DeGrinch
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Oct 26, 2007 |
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I liked your story, it's self, but your formating could use a lot of work to make it more 'readable' for your audience. I hope you'll tell us more about the female characters thoughts and past. Give us some more. (7/10)
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