|
|
|
|
|
Who is the Boss
Author: MasterD
|
| |
(Added on Aug 3, 2007)
(This month 17282 readers) (Total 34694 readers) |
| |
The Master discovers that his slave is disobeying because she wants to be punished. He wants obedience, and sets about training his slave to do things his way. Since pain is what his slave wants, he is forced to use other methods to get his message across. |
| Ratings and Reviews: |
| Number
of Ratings: 4 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
| 1 |
2 |
3 |
4 |
5 |
6 |
7 |
8 |
9 |
10 |
| 0% |
0% |
0% |
0% |
0% |
0% |
0% |
50% |
50% |
0% |
|
Weighed
Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
Rating:  (8.5/10) |
Highest
Rating:  (9/10) |
| Lowest
Rating: (8/10) |
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
mkemse
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jul 18, 2008 |
| |
very well written nice job (9/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
violetgem
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Aug 6, 2007 |
| |
I really enjoyed reading this story. The descriptions and tone of the story keep visuals in my head and emotions running through me. It was great to watch her transform and how He was willing to put in so much effort with her. I do agree that going deeper into their feelings and what they are thinking in more detail would allow the reader to absorb themselves in both characters positions more and appreciate them both and what they are going through. Great work, I am hoping there will be more to come. :)
~gem~ (9/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
masterdw
(Edit) (Aug 6, 2007)
- Thank you. More will follow, and more analysis of feelings, but RL means it may be another few days.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Pussycat Sam
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Aug 4, 2007 |
| |
Great stuff Master D, please can I have some more soon?
However, can I request that you include a bit more about how what he's doing makes him feel. I wanna know what's going through his mind while he's teaching her to behave properly. What's he seeing when she's on the floor at his feet? And how's she feeling too? I wanna hear all about he pain of not being allowed to piss for hours or the humiliation of having to eat from the floor or the way her juices drip down her leg. More detail please.
But the plot's fantastic.
Thank-you very much for turning me on today!!
Love Sam.
xxx (8/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
masterdw
(Edit) (Aug 4, 2007)
- I really appreciate your comments. I will try to give you more of what you want. I really write for feedback and this constructive criticism is all an author can expect. Thank you.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
donriser
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Aug 3, 2007 |
| |
I really enjoyed your story. It drew me in and I wanted more. Hope you will continue with it. I will watch for it. (8/10)
|
|
|
About 