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A Ponygirl Story
Author: John Brand
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(Added on Jun 21, 2007)
(This month 39130 readers) (Total 59549 readers) |
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A beautiful girl is abducted, to be forced to become a ponygirl. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Jun 26, 2007 |
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An interesting start, but has too many typos!
I like chapter 2 and I raised my score accordingly with the lack of typos! (8/10)
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- Replied by:
ThisYouWillDo
(Edit) (Jun 26, 2007)
- Thanks. I will try to do better concerning the typos in furute!!!! ;)
JB
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jun 25, 2007 |
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all pony girl stories to me are great (10/10)
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- Replied by:
ThisYouWillDo
(Edit) (Jun 26, 2007)
- A discriminating reader! :)
Thanks
JB
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| Reviewer:
Skruddgemire
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Jun 24, 2007 |
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Good start, but was over before it really got interesting. Can't wait for the rest. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
ThisYouWillDo
(Edit) (Jun 26, 2007)
- Thanks. More will come. Please see other replies regarding the pace of the story.
JB
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| Reviewer:
littleone_
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Jun 24, 2007 |
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I totally agree with ElectricBader's comments but disagree with his score. Come on, this story has an awesome start! But then being a girl maybe I see it differently then ElectricBadger did. There were a few distracting typos in the story. If they were corrected and ElectriBadgers advise was followied this story would definately be a 10! Mr. Brand, please hurry up with the next chapter. Pretty please! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
ThisYouWillDo
(Edit) (Jun 26, 2007)
- The next chapter has already been submitted - before I had the benefit of anyone's criticisms - all of which are valid. So I'm afraid you'll see the same mistakes over again when that story's put up. Bear with me: I promise to improve as much as I can. I'm after a score of 11/10 ;)
JB
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ElectricBadger
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Jun 23, 2007 |
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Good start and you can't go wrong with ponygirls! Might be nice to slow the action down a bit and add some more detail and explanation -- the piercing scene was over in a heartbeat, for instance. I look forward to more! (7/10)
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- Replied by:
ThisYouWillDo
(Edit) (Jun 26, 2007)
- Thanks. Your comments are appreciated: I will try to slow the pace down in future. As a first time writer, it's hard to judge these things.
JB
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| Reviewer:
steph2004ster
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Jun 22, 2007 |
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Non stop action is great, but perhaps too much too fast. Humiliation is then lost. Typos are a small inconvenience. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
ThisYouWillDo
(Edit) (Jun 26, 2007)
- :)
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