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Boston Fetish Fair
Author: mainesubbie
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(Added on Jun 19, 2007)
(This month 9193 readers) (Total 17438 readers) |
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the girl and her friend have no idea what they are in for when they agree to meet Him at the fetish fair. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Jun 20, 2007 |
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The story is great, packed full of scenes and action. The idea was brilliant and really could be expanded quite easily.
Now for the nit picking. Your formatting is very crowded, paragraphs are much too long, and a complete proofreading by a third party would catch a lot of typos. Other than that a great job. (7/10)
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