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Deep African Hell
Author: Louis Cypher
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(Added on Jan 4, 2007)
(This month 21610 readers) (Total 43837 readers) |
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A 42-YEAR-OLD BLONDE WOMAN IS KIDNAPPED BY A LARGE GROUP OF BLACKS WHILST ON VACATION IN NIGERIA. HER PARTNER IS THEN FORCED TO DECEIVE HER YOUNGER DAUGHTERS INTO BOARDING A PLANE AND JOINING THEIR MOTHER IN THE HEART OF AFRICA ONLY TO THEN FALL INTO THE HANDS OF THE HUGE NEGROS. (IN SCREENPLAY FORMAT) |
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| Reviewer:
bubba
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May 7, 2008 |
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The buildup was quite long but the sense of anticipation you generate with your approach is really very good. Your attention to detail really takes the experience of reading this kind of stories to a new level, granted i may have just skipped it if I did not already know about the synopsis, Hope you intend on finishing the story sometime soon! (10/10)
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mkemse
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Jan 19, 2007 |
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the story was ok, but a few suggestions, don't leave the top half empty so the reader has to scroll down, i thought a blank page was posted, no real fond ofthe "screen play" asspect of it, felt like i was reading a script which you said it was, stories should notbe a challange to read, it should have been posted like and otherstory, but certainly for me, not in a scrren play script form, to hard to follow and a realy bad layout
also not sure how many will be aware of this your author name is the lead characters name in "Angel Heart" that role played by Robert De Niro
After attempting to read it, i decided since it is in screen play for, to simply wait for the movie to come out, just to hard to readthe way you have it layed out. If i wanted to read a script i would be in a movie, Sorry to be so harsh, the reality is i can't follow it, but love the idea and the concept (5/10)
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joey
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Jan 5, 2007 |
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Loved the story and can't wait for the next act. Also enjoyed the screenplay aspect - a neat change of pace. The descriptive nature of the prose was top notch. I am totally intrigued as to how the story will develop. (10/10)
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