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Submissive Spirits
Author: Lewis Chappelle
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(Added on Dec 20, 2006)
(This month 13710 readers) (Total 34945 readers) |
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A rather long piece detailing the initial stages of several M/f relationships based on D/s. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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Highest
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Lowest
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 6, 2010 |
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Liked it and didn't like it. I liked the general idea, but the problem is that there's too many ideas crammed into the general idea.
It's like Lewis Chappelle got really inspired while writing, feverishly wrote down his spurts, but didn't follow through on most of them.
This gives the story a bit of a feel like a lot of stuff was thrown in a mix and knitted together with a bit of a storyline.
To boot, my imagination was stretched almost beyond breaking point as well.
Okay-ish story. Seen better from Lewis Chappelle.
JJ (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
oldwino
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Jan 8, 2007 |
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Slow but great start. Caracters deleoping well. Hope the story intensifies as it builds. Would love to see intense puplic exhibition and humiliation (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Millie
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Dec 30, 2006 |
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This was a first class piece of work, however, for me the end was a little rushed. I look forward to reading more.
(9/10)
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stormbringer
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Dec 29, 2006 |
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I liked it, a very nice read (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
little_rose
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Dec 28, 2006 |
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i love this, the characters and the scenes. very very hot.
i look forward to more! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
bobby44
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Dec 24, 2006 |
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Well written. Good development of the charecter 'Ann'. The sequence of the 'wine steward' was the highlight for me.
(7/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Dec 24, 2006 |
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I do agree there should be more dialog. This was a great story. I would love to see were you take it from here. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Dec 22, 2006 |
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not a bad start, where do you go from here? (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
DeGrinch
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Dec 22, 2006 |
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A good job. One suggestion, I'd like you to write more dialog into your work, I know it's hard, however, it gives the reader a feeling of knowing the charactors in the story. I find this feeling missing in your stories to some extent, in this story the first pages feel/read almost like a documentary, as opposed to entertaining fiction. Please don't take this badly, you write very well, and what you write is easy to read(not the case with a lot of stories). I'm just trying to be helpful. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
bubsmoeder
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Dec 21, 2006 |
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Looking forward to the next installment. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
jdsaunders01
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Dec 21, 2006 |
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Loved all your work so far. :) (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
bkmasta
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Dec 20, 2006 |
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very well written and I await the next segment (8/10)
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