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A Borrowed Woman
Author: Jon Maddux
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(Added on Nov 14, 2006)
(This month 23486 readers) (Total 56821 readers) |
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Wife provides hubby with a toy |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
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Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Sojurboy
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Oct 10, 2010 |
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I am sorry to say that this story doesn't build up well to the climax. I was losing interest before I got to round two. The concept behind the first encounter was superb, but the finish of part one was weak. I would suggest that the concept of part one be carried on further, rather than a whole new scenario partially developed in the little space allotted. The author had a good imagination in part one, just didn't develop it they way he should have. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
cala
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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Paragraphs .... Please! (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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Excellent "rape" story! Wud like also to have present as that. Well written to the point story. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
JonMaddux
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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LOL of course i give myself a 10! to those wishing for another story, i have submitted one and it should be posted in the next few days. I have about a dozen more to proof read and post still. (10/10)
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geoff
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Nov 14, 2006 |
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Well done for an early effort. I have a personal preference for longer stories that allow character development and this could deliver a part 2. Well written grammatically (always a plus for me). I can't believe how many authors don't bother to spell check or reread after autocorrecting, or how many reviewers ignore basic English as a pre-requisite to writing stories in this language. Keep it up! (7/10)
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- Replied by:
JonMaddux
(Edit) (Nov 15, 2006)
- thank you, i agree... although my southern english takes hold sometimes i try not to write that way and as you said spell check or word usually catches my flubs (thankfully). Perhaps on my next deployment i may have time to delve into a longer scene developing characters and plots into something longer? My problem is i tire quickly of women after i deflower their backdoors... Everest's peak has been reached so to speak, of course i could try developing a make character who simply goes after numerous women?
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| Reviewer:
Lee Boudine
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Nov 14, 2006 |
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An imaginative quick fix: the threesome was an unexpected pleasure to the reader. A bit more description of the women's physical features and responses, and reactions could have raised this story to a 10. Well done part 1; I eagerly anticipate the next parts........................lee. (8/10)
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mkemse
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very good reading, hope you plan to add more (7/10)
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- Replied by:
JonMaddux
(Edit) (Nov 14, 2006)
- This was the first story i posted and one of a half dozen i wrote while deployed so i am kinda shocked it got such good ratings. I have several more stories but they arent part of a series just seperate.
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