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Zippers
Author: Anita Parker
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(Added on Sep 22, 2006)
(This month 256373 readers) (Total 460703 readers) |
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A dowdy, depressed young secretary, in desperation, seeks help with her non\'existant love-life. She is transformed beyond her dreams and for a while nothing could be better but this is not to last as she finds herself being steered in more degrading, \'commercial\' directions. |
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Average (?): (9/10) |
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Reviewer:
Denkira
(Edit) |
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Dec 22, 2014 |
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very well written.The humiliation is gradual and very well presented. (9/10)
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Reviewer:
Martiniman
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May 17, 2012 |
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Updated 5/17/12...Another fun, but brief chapter that I enjoyed. Anita has had her body altered, yet is still mentally fighting her new reality. Waiting to see how further training will affect her, and will she ever be able to escape, or is this her new life?...............Updated 5/8/12...Fun but brief chapter...............Updated 4/3/12........Very nice, as I enjoyed the last 2 chapters. I really liked the collar & the way Davina is treating Anita. Updated 3/16/12.......I've read this story again after reading the comments from JimmyJump & I've reevaluated my original 5 rating. My comment about the story having no clear path might have been a bit harsh, yet I still wish the path were more defined. This story is very intriguing & good, yet a story that has gone on for over 5 years probably doesn't have clear path, and that's ok based on the entertainment provided. As far as my comment about no ending, that was made based on the story not being updated in well over a year. And for a story that has gone on for 5 years & 6 months there probably won't be an ending as the author is more likely just adding new ideas that torture Anita. Again, this is ok based on the entertainment the author is providing. I would love a little more insight into what Anita's future is so I can enjoy her journey a bit more & possibly quicker updates, but yes, this is a good story & worth the time to read. My apologies for a rushed first review. Keep up the good work Anita Parker............................... Long story with no clear path & no ending...very frustrating!!! (8/10)
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- Replied by:
JimmyJump
(Edit) (Mar 11, 2012)
- Seems you didn't quite grasp the story or even didn't fully read it, since "Zippers" has a well-defined and very clear path.
Since the writing itself is above par, you seem to work out your own shortcomings through the rating, because a story of this quality -speaking of the writing alone here- merits far more than a mere five score... Better cut down on the Martinis before attempting another review... JJ
- Replied by:
Martiniman
(Edit) (Mar 15, 2012)
- Well Mr. JimmyJump I'm very disappointed in your response to my review. First off, I respect you & your reviews, as I use them often to determine if I will read a story. However, it was my honest opinion & if reviews & reviewers are going to be attacked why have the review option? Seems all stories will be given high scores with no real value to the score or the story won't be reviewed at all. That said, you gave me your opinion of my review & it's just that...your opinion. I'm not angry, just disappointed at being attacked by a reviewer I respect. But what I will do in fairness to the author, is I will read this story again & if I feel it deserves a higher rating, I will rate it accordingly. I'm not above making mistakes & reading the story again will tell me if I made a mistake or if I reviewed it honestly, but my review will be mine without outside pressure. Happy? And yes, I'm being genuine...I appreciate your reviews & use them often.
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Reviewer:
Losian
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Apr 10, 2012 |
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Exceptionally written, the descriptions of their transformations are great. Just would love to see what happens to Lisa in the future, maybe a meeting again or something like this. Looking forward to what will happen. (9/10)
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Reviewer:
dragonfly996
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Dec 10, 2010 |
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Lovely! Yes indeed hope there's a lot more. Thanks (9/10)
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Reviewer:
Katt_
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May 6, 2010 |
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I really love htis story. In fact, I registered just so I could review this. It is the best story on the site, and I hope we get more chapters soon. I particularly like how she is made into a retro style whore and slut. (10/10)
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Reviewer:
avaro
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Feb 21, 2010 |
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What a hot story ! Please write more ! (10/10)
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zimon
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Mar 4, 2009 |
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Excellent story and very well written. I especially liked the detailed descriptions that give this tale a touch of realism which is often missed in erotic stories. Having a certain affection to the sujet of "transformation of prudish girls to sluts" I must say that this is one of the best-written stories on that theme which traces nicely the protagonist's development and her inner strife between her old self and her newly formed personality. And I have to admit it was this story that made me become a member of bdsmlibrary just to review it and I hope we will be able to read more about the continuing transformation of Anita. Just one minor point of critique: In chapter 24 Anita is told to "make sure he gets of twice", whereas in chapter 26 only her oral service is described. One could argue now that the second act takes place although not mentioned in the story but another solution (e.g. along the lines '... he came in my pussy quickly ...' and '... then I turned around ...' with an increasing of filthyness) in my opinion would have been better. Anyway, keep up the good work and I hope to read more of Anita's development soon. (10/10)
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Ladykate
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Sep 20, 2008 |
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I'm very glad to see you continuing this story and hope for more in the future. It seems Anita and Lisa are slowly being experts in what they hate. Keep it up! (9/10)
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JimmyJump
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Mar 31, 2008 |
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(Sept 23, 2006)I do hope Anita IS free, the next weekend, otherwise this would end-up being a rather short story... Neatly written, very promising start... Edit: Oh boy, have we come a far way in the last 18 months... The story's so good I'm running out of points here. We should be able to at least give 15/10, cuz anything less is blasphemy... 'Zippers' has so much body it feels like reading in 3-D. Wonderfull! And a maximum score. JJ (10/10)
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- Replied by:
slaveanita
(Edit) (Sep 24, 2006)
- I knew the alternative ending would be easier to write...x
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Reviewer:
TOXIS
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Jul 19, 2007 |
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A unique voice. A woman who writes honestly about humiliation from a female point of and empower. Really remarkable mix of basic hotness and so much more. Well written and paced. Just one question; do you wear your croles when you write? (10/10)
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subKatie69
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Jul 15, 2007 |
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A great story just found it in the last few days and have read what is posted it is very well writen and has it all great plot charchters cannot wait for more of this story keep up the good work anita (10/10)
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Reviewer:
chksng19
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May 7, 2007 |
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A fine start on the tale, literate and interesting. Anxious for more! Update 5-7. Powerful story, masterfully told. Outstanding plot, meted out in proper amounts to keep things exciting. Ms Parker, I am pleased to continue following your tale! (10/10)
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Reviewer:
Ghostship
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Mar 31, 2007 |
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Excellent story. Consistently very well written; with good pace, story line and dialogue, and very sexy. One of the best on this site that I have seen. Keep it up! (10/10)
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Reviewer:
texanpauline
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Mar 30, 2007 |
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Superb story. Original and creative, and well written. An absolute masterpiece of humiliation. I can't wait to find out what happens next. (10/10)
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Reviewer:
willpasha
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Mar 10, 2007 |
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It's moving along and building up nicely. It's generating a nice "I want to find out what happens next" which isn't the case with 98% of all stories. (8/10)
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Reviewer:
bluepink
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Mar 3, 2007 |
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I check your story almost daily, only to see no more chapters are added. Please continue to write. Can't wait to find out what's next. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
slaveanita
(Edit) (Mar 3, 2007)
- Am really sorry, I have more written but can't post it yet as have lost Word from my system. Will remedy. *spanks self*
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Reviewer:
azrlg17
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Jan 8, 2007 |
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A really slow start. The first sex in chapter 10. So I hoped it would improve but then came chapter 12 and that was only disgusting. How anyone can think that removing someones ovaries is sexy or can turn anyone on is beyond me. Since the two slaves already talked about suicide I hope they end it and the story in the next chapter and what we have read is basically report to the cops. A nice epilogue were all the others get sent to the most disgusting prison would be nice. (4/10)
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- Replied by:
slaveanita
(Edit) (Feb 28, 2007)
- I make no apologies for my kink. If you don't enjoy this fantasy then fine, move along to something that's more to your taste. The BDSM community emphasizes 'safe, sane, consensuality' in real life and respect for other people's kinks. This is extreme fantasy here. There are lots of things that turn me right off, but there are so many more that drive me wild. The variety is what makes this place so great and a non-judgmental environment allows and nutures this variety. Respect is fundamental in the BDSM community. Don't deride my sexuality, it's hurtful.
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azrlg17
(Edit) (Mar 10, 2007)
- Sorry if that is hurtful to you, but you should put an extreme flag in ore some other kind of warning, the part with the ovaries really hit me like a baseball bat in the stomach.
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H Dean
(Edit) (Sep 30, 2008)
- It should be pointed out that this review violates review guidlines and is a prime example of how not to write a review. Even had you hated the story, the quality of writing in this tale is quite high. You do this site, this story and the readers a diservice when you review based on content you find distateful.
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Reviewer:
H Dean
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Nov 10, 2006 |
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So far, so good. Obviously, this is a start to what is to come. There is, however, very little here to rate or review - thus the "7" rating. I will await the following chapters for further review. Edit: Any flaws in this story are completely hidden from my eyes. As of chapter four this is a well thought out tale. The eroticism is well presented - as is everything else in this story. My rating has increased to a 9 from a 7, and I eagerly await more chapters. Edit: This story continues to excell in all areas. It is paced extremely well and the characters all have signifigant life, more so than most stories I have read here. Normally I would await a bit more of such a story to increase my review rating to a "10". However, the style, story and technical savy demand I increase my rating. Quite an excellent piece of work. (10/10)
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Reviewer:
Benfan
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Nov 9, 2006 |
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Upped rating to 9, as this is getting better and better. Pace and detail are just right - can't wait to see where this is all going. (9/10)
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dennisthmn
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Oct 1, 2006 |
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very good start, hope the next chapters are up to it (8/10)
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Reviewer:
Garyminuk
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Sep 25, 2006 |
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Loved the way you build the vulnerability into the story. Lovely start, as others I sincerely hope there will be more. (8/10)
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Reviewer:
La Toya
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Sep 24, 2006 |
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Nice first chapter. Good set up for what is to come (7/10)
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Reviewer:
mkemse
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Sep 23, 2006 |
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very enjoyable to read (7/10)
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Reviewer:
Millie
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Sep 23, 2006 |
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This is a very good start. I am looking forward to seeing where you take this. (7/10)
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Reviewer:
sunburststrat
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Sep 23, 2006 |
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What a tease you are Anita! - stopping where you did. But you got me hooked. Please continue. There are far too few f/f stories for my tastes. Like "H.Dean", I will wait to hear a bit more and adjust the rating accordingly. There were a few editing things, if I remember right. If you need a proof-reader, just ask. I'd be happy to. (7/10)
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