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My weekend with the girls
Author: wannabme_2000
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(Added on Sep 5, 2006)
(This month 20560 readers) (Total 48325 readers) |
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about my attitude with wemen and taught a lessen by two of them. They torture me in many ways and when they let me go..Well thats another story. |
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Weighed
Average (?): (4/10) |
Average
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Highest
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Lowest
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Reviewer:
Mist
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Apr 18, 2008 |
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writing skill is lacking mis spelled many words. (2/10)
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Reviewer:
MISTRESS H
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Apr 13, 2008 |
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I was held in a trance, to read some of the devious things that was done to this man. Some of which, were well thought out almost auto-biographical. Then ending was a bit of a surprise, but expected. All in all I would say well done, and keep them cuming. MISTRESS H (7/10)
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Reviewer:
gremlin
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Sep 12, 2006 |
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Paragraphs nonexistant. Constant mis-spellings. Potentially good storyline - but the literary quality is far too distracting to be able to enjoy the story. Don't quit- just have someone edit for you. (2/10)
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Reviewer:
schoolboylv
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Sep 7, 2006 |
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Good effort, but your writing skills need a lot of improvement. First off, your paragraphs are way too long. Each of those paragraphs could be split into 3 or 4. There are many grammar and spelling errors. In your synopsis you mispell "women". I don't think you should stop writing, but you need to find yourself a good editor or someone to work with you and try to improve your writing skills. (5/10)
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Reviewer:
trainmanretep
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Sep 6, 2006 |
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great idea but the writing skills are lacking. As an english composition this would be D- (3/10)
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Reviewer:
abitbent
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Sep 5, 2006 |
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The author has a great imagination, he/she just needs to work on creatively expressing it. Lots of "She then..." and "I..." and not a paragraph to be found. (4/10)
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