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The slave
Author: yoyo123
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(Added on Sep 1, 2006)
(This month 16925 readers) (Total 32556 readers) |
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Many enemas F/m cock and ball torture |
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Average (?):  (3/10) |
Average
Rating:  (2.5/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
slaveboy 6
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Dec 24, 2014 |
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The potential was there, but this needed to flushed out more. Disappointing effort (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
gremlin
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Sep 3, 2006 |
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Way too short. Scenes not fleshed out at all. Dialogue not well written and formatted horribly. Probably not a native English speaker. Nice try - the idea was ok - but the writing is horrible. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mistress M
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Sep 2, 2006 |
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I hated to review this story, but you need to go back to the drawing board and come back with something coherent. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
uktrucker100
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Sep 1, 2006 |
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nice idae but put over like a child:-( (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Millie
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Sep 1, 2006 |
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I wish I could give this a higher rating but it really doesn't deserve it. Everything is rushed, the speech is presented incorrectly and the punctuation is almost nonexistant. You need to go back and start over, take your time and then get someone to read and correct it before you post it. (3/10)
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