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Author: tony scott
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(Added on Aug 31, 2006)
(This month 9641 readers) (Total 22849 readers) |
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sandra wanted to join the local gang she had to first do a test but she ened up becing their sex toy to do with as they wanted |
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Average (?):  (5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Rocky
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Sep 30, 2006 |
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Perhaps the author is too young to be on this site at all, as he or she apparently has not yet learned the rudiments of sentence constuction, punctuation (particulary quotation marks), or when to begin a new paragraph. While the plot may have been interesting if written with a semblance of this knowledge, right now there is nothing more there than a jumble of words. (1/10)
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jip
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Sep 12, 2006 |
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The story itself is not bad. Wonder what will follow? (7/10)
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chksng19
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Sep 3, 2006 |
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Awful grammar makes one distracted from the tale trying to make sanse as to who is saying what. Interesting start of a story; is there more? (5/10)
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SimonMagick
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Sep 2, 2006 |
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I like it alot. It's a cruely funny, hot and sassy little yarn. As for the puntuation-free style, it suited the rapid pace of Sandra's humiliation; no time for her to think logically.
Hoping for a part 2. (9/10)
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Trues_Doll
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Sep 1, 2006 |
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No commas, no quotation marks, very poor grammatical skills displayed here, i guess i should have heeded the warning from the other reviewers...and with no codes, i found myself reading content i do not seek out! (2/10)
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jamb
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Sep 1, 2006 |
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I wanted to keep reading, I did, but it's just too hard without spaces and punctuation. Work on that, and you'd have a great story. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Millie
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Aug 31, 2006 |
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This story needs punctuation, things like speech marks and commas. It needs a new line started each time someone new speaks. Without these things it is almost impossible to read. (5/10)
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mkemse
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Aug 31, 2006 |
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you realy need to use codes to give the reader an idea and a nice synpsis would would nicealso (6/10)
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