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Willies New Bitch
Author: taskmaster11
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(Added on Jul 17, 2006)
(This month 98212 readers) (Total 227984 readers) |
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A smitten Delivery Driver plans the absolute subjegation of a total stranger, to control of a tall,innocent church going beaufitul 31 years old blonde mother of two. First stalking her, before , in her own home, submtting her to a series of brutal sexual beatings and assaults designed to ensure her future compliance and submission to him |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
stphnrogers
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Dec 4, 2008 |
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i enjoyed the story and i'm going to go see if i can find more by taskmaster11. (8/10)
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slut2002gyrl
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Feb 16, 2008 |
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Piercing, tattooing, branding may reduce her value, but it would make this gyrl juice even more! Hot story!! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
johhny
(Edit) (Feb 16, 2008)
- the piercing is well worth a thought,
thanxs for the vote
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| Reviewer:
zakaluka
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Jan 22, 2008 |
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Extremely enjoyable. Was surprised at such a quick submissions, but overall a lot of fun to read. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
bbwsfslut
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Aug 21, 2007 |
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:-) (9/10)
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- Replied by:
johhny
(Edit) (Aug 22, 2007)
- I'll take that as as positive then! :-)
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| Reviewer:
bmtphoenix
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Aug 20, 2007 |
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A decent story, but it loses points for
a.) Grammatical errors. I don't look for them, but there were quite a few here...enough that I had to go "What?" and look back a few times.
b.) No way she would've submitted that quickly.
c.) Story is rather tired. Stalker rapes victim pretty much sums the whole thing up. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Nikolaj
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Aug 20, 2007 |
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Just excellent story. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
johhny
(Edit) (Aug 20, 2007)
- many thanks for the comment, hope you also enjoy the next part I'm working on
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| Reviewer:
willadams
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Oct 23, 2006 |
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Excellent fucking story!!!! Great whack off material. Kim is brought down as truly a bitch slave should be, Congrats on this terrific tale. (10/10)
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johhny
(Edit) (Oct 29, 2006)
- What can I say, many thanks seem's a little tame, still, thanks all the same!
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iggygor
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Oct 5, 2006 |
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Very good story, well thought out, well developed.
But geoff's review is too kind: "A few grammatical errors"? "The odd word that begs for a good proofreader"?
How about "virginia" or "virgina" for "vagina"? That's the laughable worst of the spelling errors. How about absolutely no concept of punctuation, so that many sentences are unreadable as written?
As I said, the story is very good, but an editor is DESPERATELY needed on the author's team.
Sorry, I really want to rate this story higher, but the textual presentation is so bad that it's distracting. (8/10)
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johhny
(Edit) (Oct 5, 2006)
- Describing the efforts of amateur writers doing no more than working on a story for a few minutes at a time, purely for the enjoyment of themselves and Site users as, 'Laughable' is both pathetic and offensive. Genuine helpful comment is one thing. If you unable to be curteous to VERY PART TIME authors, dont bother, they dont need you!
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iggygor
(Edit) (Oct 6, 2006)
- > If you unable to be curteous to
> VERY PART TIME authors, dont bother,
> they dont need you!
OK, you're right. I did say "Very good story, well thought out, well developed" (all true), but then I got carried away with the negatives.
I should have simply said, "In my opinion, the author should request help from an editor or fellow writer to correct the grammar and punctuation."
I'll try to be more polite in the future. The last thing I want to do is to discourage people from contributing--it's too difficult to write a story (and too easy to criticize). I deserved the dope-slap.
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Sonia_Masters
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Sep 9, 2006 |
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I love this subject - rape and slavery. And I really get turned on by making the husband a gay slave - and the mum (incest would be great). If the kids were old enough he could do them too. I look forward to the next chapters. Great story line. Sonia_Masters@hotmail.co.uk (8/10)
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slutsteph
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Aug 11, 2006 |
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Aiiii, what a hot start! girl hopes the action moves out of the house at this point, and that bitchkim is somehow given a more permanent reminder of her new owner. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Parker
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Aug 7, 2006 |
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Nice work. I look forward to reading more. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
geoff
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Jul 17, 2006 |
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Falls short of a 10 only because of a few grammatical errors. Comma usage is a bit over the top and there is the odd word that begs for a good proofreader. Overall, an excellent story, well delivered. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jul 17, 2006 |
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you work is always great (10/10)
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