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A+ Amy
Author: USMC4ME
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(Added on Apr 24, 2006)
(This month 35940 readers) (Total 87491 readers) |
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This is in fact the first story I have ever posted anywhere. Amy was the hot little girl in highschool that everyone wanted. This is the story of her abduction and her first night as a prisoner. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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seeder21
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Jun 18, 2016 |
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I would like to see another installment on this. (9/10)
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starglitter
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Jul 10, 2011 |
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Good storyline. Short. (6/10)
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agirlsfantasy
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Jan 29, 2010 |
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Great story, however only giving it a 9 because it ended so soon. Looking forward to another chapter. (9/10)
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nloah
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Mar 11, 2009 |
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Too soft for me but for the most part well written. Seems to have a strong daddy dom vibe to it (7/10)
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JimmyJump
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Jan 28, 2009 |
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Thge writing is indeed good and solid. The content however, has been done so many times before, and way better than this.
With way better, I mean with a more believable motivation for his deeds by the abductor, and a more believable response and train of thought by the abductee.
But I sure must read other stories by USMC4ME, because this author shows promise.
JJ (7/10)
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symphony
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Jan 27, 2009 |
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i was really impressed with this story, i look forward to part 2 (10/10)
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Baggy016
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Dec 8, 2007 |
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What a great turn on, I do hope you will be adding to this (Please). (10/10)
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ShyDarkAngel
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Nov 4, 2007 |
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This was a great story. I absolutely love it. I am normally not one to like punishment by whipping but I really liked that section. I hope part II will be coming out soon. (8/10)
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bmtphoenix
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Sep 5, 2007 |
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A bit soft for my tastes...I don't think the "Heavy" tag applies at all. Still, it was very well written. A bit short though...more please? :) (8/10)
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g3po2
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Aug 12, 2007 |
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Unlike some stories, this one is rather plausible. The motivations of the only two characters is mixed, creating some tension for the reader. Sort of a miss goody two shoes turned tease being grabbed up by Richy Rich.
Sadly, this author quit a bit too early. Either a few follow up stories are needed, or an epilogue, or an edit where more plot is revealed. My imagination brings me to any number of possible conclusions... they get married and live a BDSM lifestyle; to she is faking the whole thing, breaks out and gets him arrested for kidnapping; to she grabs the handcuffs and makes him the prisoner.
This author left lots of room for what could happen next, but hasn't followed up on any of it... (10/10)
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Razor7826
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Apr 26, 2007 |
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Excellent work. Could use a more developed ending, though. Did you plan on more chapters? (9/10)
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ares626
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Jul 14, 2006 |
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as a female i find this very exciting. you used great deatail and i got into it... great job!! i can't wait for more:-) (10/10)
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DrkTntedAngel
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Jun 11, 2006 |
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I liked it. Though I do not think it was rape. To me, if she liked it, and cums, which it seems she did in the beginning before her punishments, then I do not see how it is rape but that is me. I love your story. I hope you write more soon. (10/10)
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Naughty
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May 16, 2006 |
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This was one of the most well written stories i've read - i absolutely cannot WAIT for the next chapter! It turned me on soooo much :oP Please hurry up and write the next chapter xx (10/10)
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chksng19
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May 4, 2006 |
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A fine short tale, with seeds of a sequel. As you state this is your first effort, it would be a good thing for you to write additional stories. Your writing skill level is quite good, and worth growing.
A quite well-written story, and "just around the edges" of being romantic. I am anxious to see more. My only suggestion: with every woman I have experienced, there is no such thing as a "little" clit orgasm. They are the most powerful... if you do them right! *grin* (9/10)
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littlegirl0014
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May 3, 2006 |
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I really enjoyed this story! I thought is was very well writen and I pray that you add to it soon. Good luck (10/10)
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ThisGirl
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May 1, 2006 |
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The writing style is clear and concise, with a good balance between fantasy and reality- the author incites our imaginations, but still keeps us grounded in necessities of the events, making the story seem so wonderfully possible in anyone's world. Unlike DAF, I think it was a good touch to have our abductor/ master care so much about his precious posession's well-being. I do agree that adding "romantic" to the codes might be appropriate- it's a sweet story. I always love the hardcore, cold, nc stories, but sometimes warm and fuzzy is nice too. When I grow up, I want a master just like the one in the story :) LOL Good job, USMC4ME! Looking forward to future submissions (of writing, that is, ha ha, pun intended.) (8/10)
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- Replied by:
USMC4ME
(Edit) (May 1, 2006)
- Wow! Thanks for the review. I love the "hardcore, cold, nc" stories as well. (semiater comes to mind) but as much as I like those stories I just couldn't write about Amy with anything but my own voice. Its not me I guess. The context in which a name is inturpeted plays a large role in a story's tone. For instance, I could really have 'fun' with a Michelle or Tara - based on life experenices - LOL. Anyway it was nice to hear you view on my B-Day. Take care.
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DAF
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Apr 29, 2006 |
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Focus on your story and you'll get the scores. I like your creativity, you have goods ideas (with a well worn theme) but I found the character development inconsistent. Our hero spent three years planning this abduction/rape yet in his mindshe is his responsiblity, he's checking her pulse and making sure he provides support to her head? Perhaps a little too warm and fuzzy for someone who is going to leave nipple clamps on a woman all night. You show promise, this can develop into a great story. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
USMC4ME
(Edit) (Apr 29, 2006)
- Thank you for taking the time to review.
The reason he spent so long thinking about the abduction before hand is of course linked to the his desire to keep her safe from real harm. Amy is not a stranger he is raping merely to satisfy his baser instincts – he wants to obtain what was seemingly unobtainable. He is brutal only as a means to an ends as his first priority is to establish the power structure.
Chapters two and three better articulate this character drive – they have been submitted but are not yet posted as of 4/29/06. When they are posted I encourage you to revisit Amy, and your score, for better or worse.
As for being warm and fuzzy - She might disagree but I don't. Maybe I could put romantic in the story code.
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| Reviewer:
Devilkisses
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Apr 25, 2006 |
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I've never reviewed a story before, but couldn't resist this one. I first read this last December and loved it and it's just as good now as when it was written - I'm glad you decided to post it. What makes this story so vivid to me is the passion it's written with, as well as the intelligent way that it is written. I can't wait to read the next installment, I'm sure it'll be great. Oh and since I am your first and biggest fan I'll always forgive you! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
USMC4ME
(Edit) (Apr 25, 2006)
- Devilkisses belongs to me in case anyone is wondering. ;)
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| Reviewer:
USMC4ME
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Apr 25, 2006 |
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Alright, I know its shameless to review one's own work - but I could not resist the option of increasing the score at least once in hopes that more would stumble across it. - If I have a fan, I hope they forgive me. :) (10/10)
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EDMUNDOSLOTH
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Apr 25, 2006 |
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Steve-B may I say that I hope that you will be posting more stories,
I clearly saw the scenes that you described and felt your excitement!
I would suggest that the story may have been better if written at slower pace over several instalments?
A success-I certainly want to read more. (8/10)
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mkemse
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Apr 24, 2006 |
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not bad at all for a first attempt, much better the most i have read on a firsttime basis for a writer (7/10)
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- Replied by:
USMC4ME
(Edit) (Apr 25, 2006)
- Thank you to everone that has reviewed the story! I have writen two more chapters and are ready to submit them really soon, so if you like the way the story sounds, check back later. Its so rewarding to see your own work posted - although I have to admit it does look really short. (I'm working on that, and will try to make the chapters longer as well) Thanks agian
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