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Inquisition
Author: Von Schmiser
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(Added on Mar 30, 2006)
(This month 261127 readers) (Total 483161 readers) |
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The story takes place sometime during the 700 years of this Inquisition. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Mr. Willit
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May 13, 2010 |
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An oldie but goodie. Meant to rate this years ago. (10/10)
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bush2bush
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Mar 4, 2007 |
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I look forward to new ways of torture (9/10)
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darknessmonger
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Jan 27, 2007 |
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chapter 21 is simply great, can't wait for Tashya to b returned for more fun (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
whiplash2003653
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Oct 11, 2006 |
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New Chapter 19 as good as usual.
Just a very minor observation concerning the effects of water on leather.
If you soak leather with water when it dries it will make leather harden. An old ancient torment widely used by primitive people all over the world, was using strips of raw hide soaked previously in water and then it would tighten as it got dry.
And people were placed on the full leather piece of a recently butchered big animal (horse, cow, etc.) and sown and left under the sun.
Thanks for your story. As said bnefore, this is a very minor obsrvation.
To keep leather pliable as described in the story, either you keep the leather piece in oil or you have it permanently greased. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
wildcard73
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Aug 2, 2006 |
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i really enjoy this story line. always looking forward to the next chapter. thanks! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Aug 3, 2006)
- Thank you very much. It's always nice to hear people enjoy that which you create. Stay tuned.....more to come. (Excuse the expression)
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chksng19
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May 18, 2006 |
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Not a bad first chapter, but quite short. I will rescore when more is added.
And indeed, as the story progresses, the quality improves. Some truly horrible ideas being put forth, and clearly described with the results on the poor victims.
Here's hoping for many more chapters
Good until the beginnings of chapter 7, when souls suddenly become mortal instead of immortal, and the woman is to recant that she is a whore of the devil; this is impossible to do as she never declared she was in the first place, so how can she recant it? Some concerns with quotation marks too.
Little details, yes, but they cause that chapter to be a little rough. Eight is rolling well once again. Keep up the good work! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 31, 2006)
- The magic box seems to be having indigestion this morning. My first try showed as being dumped. If you got it please excuse the repetition.
In any case thanks for taking the time to review. Sorry it was short but I have a tendency to think I am making the parts to Long. I am surprised when it appears and is so short. I will try to make them more lengthy. Thanks again and hopefully as more is added you will like and upgrade the rating. :-)..
- Replied by:
Von Schmiser
(Edit) (May 18, 2006)
- Sorry 'bout that. Recant was thewrong word. Should have been confess. She of course was presumed to be quilty of whatever she was accused of. Thanks for continued input. Appreciated
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| Reviewer:
isabeau
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Apr 11, 2006 |
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yikes, i was so surprised she lasted as long as she did, before she finally passed out.. don't apologize about spelling or not writing very well. the descriptions were terrifically terrifying and i cringed with each new torture. keep up the good work. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Apr 11, 2006)
- Thanks for the nice words. I think if you are into the story the occasional spelling and other goofs wont ruin it for you. I know in reading other offerings here by others, it doesnt hurt my enjoyment. Don't go'way..more to come
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DemonLady
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Apr 8, 2006 |
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I enjoyed this very much. I have read your other story (as you know) and it also was very good. I love torture scenes and you do them well. Keep up the good works and more more more.
DL (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Apr 8, 2006)
- Thank for the kind words. I am nowheres near finished with either story. New chapter to the other story sent in today. I'm starting to think you would be a good fill in for Si Lun.;-)
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| Reviewer:
Anne
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Apr 8, 2006 |
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I liked this story because I could imagine myself as the poor helpless young thing at the mercy? of these fiends. The description of the tortures inflicted are horrably real. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Apr 8, 2006)
- Thank you for the nice words my dear. The descriptions are intended to be that way, Glad I succeeded for you. I dont think the word mercy is in their vocabulary, as you will read as more parts of the story unfold.
Again thanks.
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jip
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Apr 3, 2006 |
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The story seems promising. Short stories are easy to read... if there is already somthing happening of course.
ps: by the way I like your comment in "comments" about the perfect spelling and grammar. Believe I will also add such thing to my stories in future! (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 31, 2006)
- Thanks for the review and kind words..Another chapter in progress and I promise it will longer.
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| Reviewer:
BitterBlue
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Apr 3, 2006 |
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Very promising !
1st chapter a bit short but ok for a teaser ;)
Puts the reader in the historical background, building up tension and gives an idea whats in store...
can hardly wait how the story unfolds
ps. wonder if the delinquent is going to be some sort of longterm object for aiding in the studies for improving and refining the techniques of the skilled inquistor.. like some historical cases
(8/10)
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- Replied by:
Von Schmiser
(Edit) (May 11, 2006)
- In looking at past reviews I noticed I had not replied to your kind review.
My apologies. It was extemely poor manners to not even acknowledge your taking time to review my efforts. Again I apologize.
Thank you for the kind words too. There will be quite a bit more to come. After all there were many unfortunates who ran afoul of the system.
And the use of a "delinquent" for a kind of training program is quite interesting. Maybe in another tale. Thanks again and sorry.
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darknessmonger
(Edit) (May 17, 2006)
- can your give some details of one of those historical cases? I would love to hear of them
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| Reviewer:
DungeonMaster6
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Apr 1, 2006 |
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Good so far, by all means keep going. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Apr 1, 2006)
- with encouragement like this how could I Not continue...Thank you for taking time to review . Next part in a day or so....Stay tuned
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