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Princess
Author: SoccerMomCheryl
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(Added on Mar 10, 2006)
(This month 40035 readers) (Total 77967 readers) |
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A middle aged soccer mom who falls under the spell of a young sexy stripper. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Martiniman
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Jan 23, 2012 |
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A very enjoyable story. I only wish it had some depraved sex in it...like Heather walking in & catching Cheryl nude & giving Princess oral sex. Still a great read! (9/10)
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JimmyJump
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Jun 25, 2010 |
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...()...“God, I need a cigarette”, I thought absentmindedly...()... is a wet dream for a critic to start demolishing a text. Because, having such a thought means that the mind is fully aware of the content of the thought, so, as a consequence, you can't be absentminded about it. The cigarette-craving should be an afterthought and the the lighting of the tobacco-stick should happen absentmindedly...
But hey, since I'm not a critic, you can rightfully ignore what I just wrote. Just keep it as an afterthought when writing about absentmindedness...
"Princess" is a nice attempt, the more so considering it is a first one.
I also must say i was a tad taken aback when reading that our beloved SoccerMomCheryl mentioned, among others, Phoenix Rising among her fav writers. To each his/her own, but Phoenix has, besides a few exemptions, written mostly below par stuff in a language hithertho only comprehended by folks with the spirits of a toddler...
Anyway, I was overly charmed by "Princess", some flaws notwithstanding.
JJ (9/10)
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Kev
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Aug 15, 2007 |
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Simply one of my favorites here. I felt the development was well paced and I enjoyed the cheerleader sceene imensely. (10/10)
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TomOfSweden
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Sep 18, 2006 |
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Soccermom managed in a very believable way tell the story of the womans mental journey into submission. Impressive (10/10)
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waynier
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Apr 9, 2006 |
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great story! (8/10)
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Racecar
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Mar 31, 2006 |
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Excellent character development and insight combined with excellent story structure and plot. A totally enjoyable story and one I wouldn't expect from a new author. I look forward to more of this story and others from the same author. (10/10)
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obscur
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Mar 30, 2006 |
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i love this story.....
but please... pursue to write it.....
i think Cheryl can descend still lower in her personal hell... Princess have the total control and can training her with great artistry.... she.. indeed... SHE can reduce her prey to a minimum thing.. SHE can, e.g., oblige her to do HER chores... SHE can take Cheryl in a cinema where she should lick in the darkness HER feet.. HER hand.. and eventually HER pussy.... (10/10)
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Ladykate
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Mar 25, 2006 |
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I loved what you did to the story that I wrote. You made Princess a little stricter and added an extra bitch in Stacy. The ending was great. I can't wait to see how it turns out for Cheryl (9/10)
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slaveneedledick
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Mar 23, 2006 |
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Excellent story. The plot was well developed and each chapter get better and better. (8/10)
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sissychar
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Mar 23, 2006 |
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LOVED part 1 the most! i'm a humiliation junkie and you hit it perfectly, please keep up the good work. Great verbal. (9/10)
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vidkid9999
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Mar 22, 2006 |
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I too like the authors sited as inspiration and am still disapointed there isn't more stories like those nowadays. This however is a great story of the humiliation of a respectable women and I hope the author keeps them coming. well done (9/10)
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gideon
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Mar 15, 2006 |
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I LIKED THE DIALOGUE (7/10)
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sub_for_you
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Mar 15, 2006 |
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God, this is hot! Keep the chapters "cuming." I just love slut-moms! Defiling her daughters' picture was a nice touch. I would be a slut too for this young Princess. She definitely knows how to handle horny older women.
(8/10)
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Borborad
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Mar 12, 2006 |
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Nice one :-) (8/10)
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rebelfan1
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Mar 11, 2006 |
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I really liked this story (10/10)
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jip
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Mar 11, 2006 |
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That is a ripoff place. 500 dollar + 100 for the guy and the price of the drinks.... and not even be allowed to touch or to play with the girl!
(5/10)
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| Reviewer:
themaneloco
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Mar 10, 2006 |
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I thought that was an enjoyable story. Perhaps it could have been expanded more, though I did find it a comfortable length. There were a few little mistakes like the lack of "speech" in the final sentence. However, these are easily corrected and did not cause any notable problems for me. I think a bit of further description in some places would have really added to the story, particularly with the appearance of the character Princess. Also, try to avoid one sentence paragraphs, you'll find it will help the story flow better. Overall it's a good first effort and I hope my comments have been of use. I'll look out for the later chapters. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
soccermomcheryl
(Edit) (Mar 10, 2006)
- Thanks for the comments on the story. I appreciate the suggestions for improvments and will keep them in mind. I am working on a couple more chapters which should be ready to release in a week or so.
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