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Brotherly Love
Author: Katie Dale
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(Added on Sep 2, 2005)
(This month 58435 readers) (Total 94294 readers) |
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Bored, at home on a rainy Sunday afternoon, Tyler and Emma discover a new game. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
wild77er
(Edit) |
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Mar 8, 2012 |
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Won't load so I don't know how well it is written
(2/10)
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| Reviewer:
Losalt
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May 8, 2010 |
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This story is right up there with the Devils Horse, Unlikely Antichrist and so one..
Both Tyler and Emma are sympathetic and believable characters.
One of my turnoffs in the story was in chapter five when Tyler starts punishing Emma for not following orders that would change her life outside the scene and disrespecting her wish not to play.
The story is mostly consensual up to that point and all the nc bits before that is done taking Emmas feelings into consideration so those events changes the story. Off course this just means that it'll be more appealing to people that enjoy nc stories but it also means that people that don't get a cold shower.
There's fairly few details that would need to be changed to remove the nc tag and just stick to the reluctant and consensual tag.
Still, the story IS well written regardless of that and you can understand why Tyler is acting like he is and you're still sympathetic towards him.
Regarding consent.. there's also one case of a minor nonconsensual body modification (don't worry, it's not a biggy physically although he should have asked first if this was to be a consensual story and it was scary for Emma there and then)
For most of the story though it's the twins mother that seams like the cause of Emmas problems as she's actually encouraging Tyler to treat Emma as a slave (as in property with no rights) instead of a submissive (plenty of rights but choosing to submit for shorter or longer durations).
Some of the excitement in the story is about when Tyler will talk to the twins mother about her attitude towards Emma and her submission.
Near the end of the story Tyler choose to revoke his promise to talk to the twins mother as a punishment, although it does to some degree end that tension implying that Emma lives "happily ever after" as a slave (not submissive) to a (relatively) kind master it's still a way of handling that tension that feels unfulfilling for me at least.. It gives you the feeling that more chapters where planed.
Personally I wish there had been more chapters with an happily ever after story where Tyler had a chat with their mother about things and they'd return to a relationship where Emma still have some rights again (like talking)..
Still, the nonconsensual bits of the story is generally fairly small things and not all that traumatic and they also fit well into the story.
Hum.. regarding something other then consent..
Realism..
Off course the believability of the story can't really be 100% considering the setting..
But the author have done a good job of it keeping the story fairly believable and unless you have a zero tolerance for the unbelievable bits I doubt that it'll get in the way of anyone's enjoyment.
Good spelling..
Correctly tagged (the snuffing of the woman that is snuffed isn't actually described in the story, just refereed too so I don't believe it deserve the snuff tag)
Anything else?
Nope.
Read the story, it's a must read for anyone that likes it's tags and those that don't like the nc tag will probably also enjoy it. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Losalt
(Edit) (May 8, 2010)
- Good grief..
I'll need to edit this one of these days... ><
- Replied by:
bulba55
(Edit) (Nov 3, 2011)
- Can anyone open this file?
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| Reviewer:
welby
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Jan 11, 2006 |
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What happened to it? (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Losalt
(Edit) (May 8, 2010)
- Try to open the .pdf file.
Unlike the .txt files it's still there.
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BoundBoi
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Nov 29, 2005 |
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Fantastic! A must Read!!! (10/10)
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Auggie'sSlave
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Nov 1, 2005 |
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More... More.. where is it?? (10/10)
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Limbo
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Oct 24, 2005 |
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Excellent! Can't wait to read more. (9/10)
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specialman
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Oct 22, 2005 |
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awsome story, please finish (10/10)
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LordVetinari
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Sep 16, 2005 |
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Interesting ideas. However, some parts of it just felt false or contrived. While the main action was tame, strange doings were hinted at on the side. Personally, I am more interested in the club at the end. (8/10)
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Wulfe
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Sep 12, 2005 |
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Very good story...especially because the Dom actually cares for the pet. Can't wait for the next chapter. (9/10)
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emmacd
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Sep 9, 2005 |
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Your story was excellent and kept dramma and suspense for first six chapters. The seaamed to bea gap with the seventh chapter. Over all it was a dandy (10/10)
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La Toya
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Sep 6, 2005 |
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Great Story, I am looking forward to reading more! (9/10)
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Master_chris
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Sep 5, 2005 |
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I enjoyable story, Looking forward to reading the next instorment.
a Must read story (9/10)
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Mobius
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Sep 3, 2005 |
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Loved this story I read it on another story archive site. excelent right up my ally keep up the good work and hope for more please (8/10)
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JC_Storm
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Sep 3, 2005 |
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interesting story, please continue (9/10)
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