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Bloom
Author: Yamesh
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(Added on Jun 28, 2005)
(This month 129987 readers) (Total 261991 readers) |
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A shy woman kidnaps and tortures a coed, making her into her sex slave. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (9/10) |
Highest
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Lowest
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| Reviewer:
Martiniman
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Jan 14, 2012 |
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A good evil erotic tale. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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May 5, 2006 |
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A good retelling of a frequently used theme. Nicely done, hoping for more.
Better as we go along, more intense. Good work!
And a finish allowing more chapters or a sequel. Very good, gory but good. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (Feb 17, 2006)
- Thank you for your kind review!
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| Reviewer:
lonewolf8
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May 4, 2006 |
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My only criticism of this story is that I'd have liked it to have gone on longer, and a bit more descriptive on some of the scenes, (tastes, smells, emotion) particularly in the mindset and emotions of Sandra while the abuse was happening.
But this is really a minor critique of what I thought was a Really, Really well done piece of writing!
How about a sequel to this with the abuse of poor Sandra continuing with even more modifications and abuse. Really get into her head this time...!
Great stuff!! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (May 7, 2006)
- This review was very helpful, as this is my first story, and I'm not used to the level of detail yet (I am learning as I go). I will incorporate more of your suggestions in my next attempt at a story. Thanks!
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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May 2, 2006 |
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I don't usually go in for this sort of story but there are always exceptions. Well written and well thought out, over all. And the latest twist, as of part 8, has me intrigued and looking forward to the next installment. I like the beat, I'll give it an 8...maybe heading to a 9.
**Well, it finally came to and end - or appears to have come to an end. On the other hand, it was certainly not how I expected the tale to end. I must say that I was a bit disapointed at the ending - it seemed a bit hurried and wrapped up rather quickly. But then, you can't make everyone happy with every twist and turn of a story. That being said, I will increase my review rating to a "9". Well done. I shall await your next tale with something less than patience. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (Feb 17, 2006)
- I am happy that you liked the newest twist...Thanks.
- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (May 5, 2006)
- Thanks for your revised review! Sorry you didn't like the ending so much (I thought it was a good way to end it while leaving options open). It sounds like it may be possible you missed the epilogue, but nonetheless thank you. I will give poor Sandra a rest for a while...
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H Dean
(Edit) (May 5, 2006)
- I got the epilogue - I was not going to leave the review as it was if there was the possibility of a new twist. That the ending was not to my tastes is on me and not you. Your creation was quite good and I promise to read the sequel if you do manage to go that far. I hope you do, by the way.
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| Reviewer:
miya79
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Mar 8, 2006 |
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i love this story! can't wait for the next chapter! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (Mar 11, 2006)
- Thank you so much for your vote!
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| Reviewer:
kelbai
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Feb 18, 2006 |
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Loved your story - very creative. What sets your story apart from others is the dark forbidding flavor - scary! Instead of just seeing the physical effects of humiliation and punishment on your captive, we see the emotional and psychological impact - how different. How deliciously sinister to bring the captive's younger sister into the basement dungeon and then how diabolical to force her to make choices as to who suffers the tortures of the captor. Hope your story and the excitement continues for a long time to come. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (Feb 18, 2006)
- I certainly can't ask for a better review than this! Very glad you're enjoying it!
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| Reviewer:
elyeti
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Feb 11, 2006 |
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GREAT !
Waiting next chapter !!! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (Feb 17, 2006)
- More on the way! Thanks.
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| Reviewer:
tragedy3
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Feb 9, 2006 |
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well written,love the storyline. would like to see more details on sex scenes. cant wait for more. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (Feb 17, 2006)
- I will do what you suggested, Thanks!
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 26, 2006 |
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i do not give a 10 very often, when i do, it is earned (10/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (Jan 27, 2006)
- Thank you, I'm glad you like it.
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| Reviewer:
USMC4ME
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Nov 10, 2005 |
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Very good story - I liked that the lead lady was still female at heart and not a "wolf in sheep clothing" so to speak. Don't let critics bother you - not ever story is meant to be extreme. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (Feb 17, 2006)
- Thank you! I think it is proving to be more extreme as we move forward.
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| Reviewer:
Lindalooking
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Jul 29, 2005 |
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This is a well written, nicely thought out plot line and one of the recent best. Clearly Yamesh has thought out the story line and adds some very nice touches (useing the rain to "capture" his victim for example). (10/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (Feb 17, 2006)
- I certainly love 10's! Very happy you like it!
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Jul 16, 2005 |
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I feel like a fish that has been gaffed and tossed into the bottom of the boat so I can thrash around waiting for the next installment of this very well paced and excellently written story. There is a distinct possibility that my initial rating will be raised as more of this story is revealed. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (Jul 3, 2005)
- I'm glad you liked it so far Lex
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lex ludite
(Edit) (Jul 16, 2005)
- I'm now one chapter behind you, and despite your penchant for gargantuan paragraphs, any author who can elevate my blood pressure is in a special class. My rating must therefore rise to match my elevated blood pressure. (9/10)
- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (Aug 9, 2005)
- Trimmed the paragraph sizes down a bit, thanks.
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| Reviewer:
SensoryOverlord
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Jul 2, 2005 |
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This is starting out very enjoyably. Good depth of description of Karen's thinking. I paticularly liked her rejection of stereotypical 'Domm' dress, and choosing to remain feminine, yet exercising total power. Keep it coming please! (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Koolbreeze
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Jul 1, 2005 |
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excellent charater development in such a short piece...looking forward to the next installment. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Grey Slayer
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Jun 30, 2005 |
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A good start, now I eagerly await the "meat" of the story. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (Jul 3, 2005)
- Serving chicken, sorry ;) Thanks for the comments.
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| Reviewer:
Tcheena3
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Jun 29, 2005 |
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Excellent start. Well written, good build up... looking forward to the serious action! (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Jun 29, 2005 |
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great start. I would like to see how the story goes before giving a higher rating (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
LordVetinari
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Jun 28, 2005 |
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This probably deserves a higher rating, but so far the only torture in this story was in the disclaimer. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (Apr 29, 2006)
- :(
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