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Jennifer's Postal Predicament
Author: SensoryOverlord
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(Added on May 4, 2005)
(This month 54139 readers) (Total 105846 readers) |
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Teen girlfriend sets up an erotic, inescapable self-bondage scene at home alone after school, as treat for boyfriend, who she expects to arrive soon. Naturally, things go awry. |
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Weighed
Average (?): (9.5/10) |
Average
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Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 26, 2009 |
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SensoryOverlord in full overload mode. A one-sentence rhyme. But that's what the story is: setting all amps to the max, setting the pick-ups to their lowest pitch, swiveling that right (or left) arm in true Pete Townshend fashion and finally, hitting the chords in a mighty stroke, bending the snares. What follows is comparable to a small earthquake, being, literally, hit by an all encompassing wall of sound, sending vibrations all through the body from top to toe, half frying yer brain, or what is left of it, in the process. Having done the former, or reading the story, you'll come out of the experience a different human being. Top class material. JJ (10/10)
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bobby69
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Jul 9, 2007 |
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One of the best, most excited and erotic stories i've read on here yet! (10/10)
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somewriter
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Aug 13, 2006 |
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Very well written and enjoyable. Personally, I did not like it as much after the twins appeared and would have preferred to read only about the couple, but that does not change that the story was very good. (9/10)
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candiL
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Aug 30, 2005 |
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hottest story i have read ever. took me 2 hours to read because i was getting hot & wet myself. how i wish i could be jennifer. now i have to go relieve myself. you are my god, plz say there is a part two. (10/10)
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BigCat
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Aug 10, 2005 |
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Wow. Some tale. Hot and heavy stuff. (9/10)
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Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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Jul 30, 2005 |
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This is one story that was just so right, but just so wrong at the same time. Utterly twisted and warped, from a twisted and warped point of view. One thing that did come through clearly - clever bondage! (9/10)
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pejanon
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Jul 14, 2005 |
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Excellent tease/denial (Jen is not the only one teased!) Great format: simple is beautiful. Smooth storytelling, hot AND witty (cuntal post input socket! yay!) Sets up delightful possibilities, I had a weird flash of 'Carrie'. If Jan is kept from cuming long enough? ... naw too weird! (9/10)
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Reviewer:
La Toya
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May 12, 2005 |
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Great story. I cany wait to see were you take it from here. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
SensoryOverlord
(Edit) (May 12, 2005)
- You can wait? Good, since I hadn't planned to do a sequel. But... (grumble) several other readers did ask what happens next, so maybe...
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La Toya
(Edit) (May 12, 2005)
- I have had some problem with the keys on my keyboard. So I just repaced it today
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Reviewer:
jbowler65
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May 8, 2005 |
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Very well written and creative. (9/10)
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Mad Lews
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May 7, 2005 |
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Great story, well writen and quite imaginative. You give a whole new meaning to the phrase " going postal" (10/10)
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chksng19
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May 7, 2005 |
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Extremely creative and well written. Anxious to see what happens with the kids outside, and further adventures with Mom. Don't let it wait until "someday", ok? (9/10)
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- Replied by:
SensoryOverlord
(Edit) (May 12, 2005)
- Thanks for the compliment. I'm surprised its rating so well, since its the first story I ever finished. 'Someday' is likely to be about when it does get a sequel though, since there are 'some number' of other stories I'd rather finish first. And I don't often feel the uh... muse.
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Reviewer:
Hogtier
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May 6, 2005 |
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extremely well written! Looking forwad to the next edition. (9/10)
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Reviewer:
max31uk
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May 5, 2005 |
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An absoultely wonderful story - highly original and erotic (9/10)
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masterkurt
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May 5, 2005 |
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the best story I happened to read in the past few years.... Very well written and very erotic. English is not my mother language and while reading most stories I get tired, this one just flows like a mountain stream (10/10)
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Kingcodez
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May 4, 2005 |
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Great Story. The bed post thing is hilarious. Please continue writing. (10/10)
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Reviewer:
feelfree2mailme
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May 4, 2005 |
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Oh...so very hot...esp. the bed post incident. (10/10)
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TzA
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May 4, 2005 |
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A very interesting story, a high above average plot, and written in a good style. I coldnt get my mind of it before I could read the whole thing. I wuld love to see a sequel... (10/10)
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CyberDragon
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May 4, 2005 |
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Starts off slow, but then builds a couple pages in. The pace at the beginning is what keeps it being professional. There is some polishing needed to get rid of typo's (have a second set of eyes read it before posting) but otherwise it's high quality! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
SensoryOverlord
(Edit) (May 12, 2005)
- Tpyos? Whta tyops?
But seriosuly, yeah. Mea culpa! My spelling is more shocking than my imagination. If only typos were erotic, I'd be famous. So OK, given that I don't personally know anyone stup.. brave enough to volunteer for proof-reader, do I hear any volunteers here? I have a whole heap of other stories that need constructive criticism rather badly.
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CyberDragon
(Edit) (May 13, 2005)
- Yeah, send off any editing to me, I edit during the day anyway, and at the very least your material is both interesting and able to be followed easily. How do you suggest we exchange contact info?
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Reviewer:
buxombabe
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May 4, 2005 |
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Fantastic story! Intelligent plot and characters, something tht could actually happen to real people. Would love to read more! (10/10)
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Reviewer:
Breannefun
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May 4, 2005 |
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Okay, lets take this in steps: First of all, the content is masterful. Witty, fun, creative, and most of all, interesting in a way that pulls you in. Second, the tense. This was odd. Most authors, including published ones, tend to write in past tense and from either a first person or third person view. SensoryOverlord has written in present tense third person and it almost reads like a screen play. Rarely does this present tense third person work, but SensoryOverlord has managed to make a great job of it. I found myself ignorning the tense and living the thoughts of the heroine! Sentence structure was a little odd at times, but nothing to get excited over. What a wonderful story...and a vivid imagination. Can I have a date? :) (9/10)
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- Replied by:
SensoryOverlord
(Edit) (May 12, 2005)
- <phew!> Tense is something with which I feel I struggle fairly unsucessfully, and this story was an experiment in that respect. So its very satisfying that *my_very_first_review_ever* mentions this kindly. Thanks.
It was also an attempt to write partly from the pov of Jennifer, which for me (being male and therefore having no idea, really, about what goes on in those pretty heads) is more of a leap of faith than an art. So that worked too. Hmmm, good. Sentence odd structure a little? Here I have really lost you. What talking about you? Date? OK, here's one: 12th May, 1994. Sorry I didn't have time to gift wrap it nicely. If on the other hand you wanted to actually _meet_, you'd have to be in Sydney, Australia, and I suspect you are not. Which is probably just as well, since you seem to think my jokes are funny, and so you must be completely mad too. Not a good idea for two mad people to get together.
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