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Convent Education
Author: pippa
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(Added on Nov 14, 2004)
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Within a seemingly devout Religious Community, a young naive schoolgirl is plunged into a nightmare world of sadistic depravity. |
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Average (?):  (9.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 22, 2009 |
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Inventive, well written and deliciously cruel. Great!
JJ (10/10)
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mkemse
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Jan 2, 2008 |
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wonderfull, outstandong, great or any adjective you want to use (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
archetype
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Nov 2, 2006 |
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Very nice story. When will we see the next chapters? You have created a terrific setting for a great story. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
lavrentyb
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Dec 4, 2004 |
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This is a tremendous story, pippa. It is well written, strong, and leaves me eager for more. The setting is different, and so are the punishements.
The only, only thing that stopped me giving you a 10 was the punctuation. I was brought up to have a zero tolerance approach to punctuation and I'm afraid your story flouts conventions in a somewhat random manner with every paragraph. Just one example: quote marks should have no spaces between them and the words to which they relate.
he asked shakily, "Are you cold sweetie?"
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he asked shakily " Are you cold sweetie".
The really good news is that punctuation is easy to fix (Try Lynne Truss: Eats Shoots and Leaves), and you already have the grammar and most importantly the creativity.
Anyway, even if you don't fix the punctuation, please give us more. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
pippa
(Edit) (Dec 5, 2004)
- Thank you for your review and I am glad you are enjoying the story. I tried to ensure grammar and spelling were correct as that, for me at least, can spoil my enjoyment when reading. Unfortunately I am right in middle of Exams so, whilst the story exists in my head, I haven't time to add next chapters yet.
Again thanks for taking time to post a review- it does encourage me to continue. I see so many people read stories but so few bother to review :).
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dreamster
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Nov 15, 2004 |
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I hesitated about the 9 pippa- it was close to 10 and I am sorry to spoil your perfect score so far.
First let me say that the story was erotic and sensual, it gripped my imagination and I felt an intense sympathy for the girl in the story. You mixed descriptions and actions very well. Writing in first person is not easy if one wants to avoid the continual "I" problem. You didn't always achieve this but you did show some excellent "hooks" to keep your reader's attention.
The grammar and spelling were mostly excellent.
The dialogue seemed authentic and helped to move the story on. I empathised with the young girl's predicament and as a struggling Author myself I envied your ability to make me feel her emotions. That is a rare gift. It stopped just short of a 10 for me as I didn't think it was quite professional standard - only because it could have been tauter and leaner in places. Things that a good professional editor would have helped you with. Please please keep it going-I want to experience through your eyes what happens to her. This is definitely one for my book shelf and to be reread at leisure. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
pippa
(Edit) (Nov 16, 2004)
- Thanks dreamster. It's ok about the 9- I appreciate your constructive comments, I know I should have cut it in places but it's hard to chop out parts that you have laboured over. Fancy editing for me ??? lol
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| Reviewer:
jaeangel
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Nov 15, 2004 |
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Wow! I really liked this one. As a former catholic schoolgirl, I'm not usually one to like convent schoolgirl stories, but this was different. This got to me. I liked it immensely, and I can't wait for more!
P.s. about embarassing a 'church elder'; Take it from me; don't try it. I did that with a nun I didn't like in fifth grade...and she gave me a detention for being disrespectful!lol! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
pippa
(Edit) (Nov 15, 2004)
- Thanks jaeangel- we at least share one thing (catholic school). I always wondered what priests, especially young ones thought hearing girls's confessions. I often was tempted to deliberately try and embarrass them? * grinz*
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| Reviewer:
Powerone
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Nov 14, 2004 |
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I enjoyed this story immensely. Great details, descriptions and suspense. Can't wait to see what happens to her in the next chapters.
(10/10)
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- Replied by:
pippa
(Edit) (Nov 15, 2004)
- Thank you also Powerone. I will try and post a chapter a week, studies permitting. I really do appreciate people reviewing and it does encourage me to continue.
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| Reviewer:
MrEd
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Nov 14, 2004 |
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The story so far is a gem, well writen with a nice balance between description and action that lets the readers mind fill in the smaller details and never feel bored because not enough is happening. Love the closed convent situation. Can't wait for more..... (10/10)
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- Replied by:
pippa
(Edit) (Nov 14, 2004)
- Thank you MrEd. This is my first story written for here and you have made my day ( well night as it's late) *grinz*
xx
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