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Soundproof
Author: asslover
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(Added on Jun 9, 2004)
(This month 8823 readers) (Total 17656 readers) |
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Story about a man who is seduced by his daughter's provocative friend, but then turns the tables on her sexually, and dominates her. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
crickette
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Jul 28, 2004 |
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Pretty good story. I always like to see people get what is coming to them.It seemed a little short and a little rushed. I think the story would have been even more interesting if there was some kind of platonic scece involvng the daughter, simply to make the friend squirm. Since she had teased him for so long, it seems like it would have only been fair for him to get a couple of days of revenge. Nothing cruel but definately humiliating. Hopefully I will see more of your work in the future. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jun 11, 2004 |
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why could this stroy not have been an NC theme (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
GaryWilcox
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Jun 9, 2004 |
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Grammar's good, story is hot and fun, but the dialogue could use some help. I'm hoping there's more to come here, and would recommend a rewrite of this chapter, focusing on the timing and essence of the dialogue. (7/10)
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