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Interrogation of an Amazon
Author: Mike Coolham
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(Added on May 13, 2004)
(This month 90555 readers) (Total 181744 readers) |
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No one has ever captured an Amazon alive - until now. Her captors know she has vital information that will lead them to the treasure they seek. She must protect that information at all costs. The story follows the interrogators' attempts to extract information from their prisoner. |
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Average (?):  (9.5/10) |
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Tavy
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Jan 29, 2012 |
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Probably the most enjoyable story I have read on here so far. (10/10)
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JimmyJump
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Jan 24, 2009 |
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I just hate it when people write stories of which the mainstream core, is in fact food for children or adolecents. Because that's what we have here: a variation on Treasure Island, except that the author chose to add a twist that could rather upset the aformentioned youths.
I cannot deny the writer has a real skill, nor that the story is very well written. But still, I felt awkward because of the strange combination.
It's a bit like reading "Harry Potter And The Clitoris Of Medusa", if you know what I mean.
"Why the nine score then?", I hear you ask... Well, next to nine it says "High quality. Very enjoyable and well written" and this story is just that.
JJ (9/10)
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TheDeSade
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Oct 20, 2006 |
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Overall a good story. The descriptions and the overall plot are good and kept my attention. Some of the characters needed a bit more development, but mostly it was enough to keep me intrigued with what was going on. Some of the seques between scenes were a little rough, but nothing that couldn't be fixed with just a bit of rewrite. Overall I give it a whip up! (8/10)
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DungeonMaster6
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Nov 5, 2005 |
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Absolutely stunning! From the beginning to the end it held my interest. Even though I wasn't really surprised by the ending, it was spell-binding for sure. The in-depth detail of some of those torture implements was well done. This story could very well have been expanded to a full length novel. (10/10)
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kaeiria
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Aug 21, 2004 |
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just flat absolutely incredible (10/10)
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- Replied by:
M Coolham
(Edit) (Aug 23, 2004)
- Thanks very much for your generous comment. I am extremely curious to know what aspect of the story made you choose to award the top mark.
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Faibhar
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Aug 12, 2004 |
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Predictability can be a fault however minor in this otherwise well composed story. (9/10)
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M Coolham
(Edit) (May 16, 2004)
- Thanks very much for taking the time to review the first chapter of my first story and for your kind words. I wondered about using period names but I worried that many such names can be rather cliched: Andromeda, Perseus, etc. But I have learnt from the comments of another reviewer to be careful with invented names. Your comments are noted regarding the modern dialogue. I had debated whether to set this story in a contemporary or historical setting. I chose a contemporary setting because some of the scenes and scenarios to follow in later chapters would have seemed thoroughly unrealistic in a modern setting. Again, thanks for taking the time to review my story. MC
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M Coolham
(Edit) (Jun 20, 2004)
- Thanks again for taking the time to review my story. As a first time writer I remain anxious to learn. You felt that Chapter Four was less good than the previous three. I am curious to know in what way you felt it was less strong. I ask in the spirit of learning further. Thanks MC.
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M Coolham
(Edit) (Jul 14, 2004)
- Hello Faibhar
Thanks for taking the time to comment on my story. I enjoy reading your thoughts. I worry when you mention typos because I scour my work for errors before submitting it. I wonder if there might be some crossover issues between "English" English, in which I mostly write, and "American" English. A couple of people who have written to me privately have asked 'what's a bos'un?' and 'what's the meaning of "smelt"?' etc. If this is not the problem, then it seems I must check even harder before submitting Chapter 8. Thanks again for your time. MC
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M Coolham
(Edit) (Aug 23, 2004)
- Thanks for your consistent and interesting comments as my story has developed. It is kind of you to have devoted so much time. I have learnt from your remarks
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Grey Slayer
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Aug 10, 2004 |
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Excellent work! Wonderfully intricate descriptions of the tortures and the beauty of the Amazons. Good plot, and though I foresaw the double-cross in Chapter 11, I was glad when it happened. Thanks for your work. (10/10)
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M Coolham
(Edit) (Aug 23, 2004)
- Thanks for your kind remarks. I am glad my story brought you pleasure. Next time I shall endeavour to better disguise the plot twist!
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Tractortorture
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Aug 9, 2004 |
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Excellent Story. Could of done with less slang. But still a very good read. (9/10)
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M Coolham
(Edit) (Aug 23, 2004)
- Thanks for commenting on my story. I note your observations about the slang
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esso
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Jul 28, 2004 |
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I have little to add to the five stars and the other reviewers comments other than thank you for the fine work. (10/10)
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tinglee
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Jul 12, 2004 |
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Mike I've followed every chapter and enjoyed them all. Very origonal, and the discription of the tortures very well done,keep it up.
Dave (9/10)
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Sterling
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Jul 12, 2004 |
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Wow. I'll agree with the others that this is one of the few stories that has me eagerly anticipating more. Great pacing, believable setting... And your fetishes seem more or less in tune with mine, which doesn't hurt. (10/10)
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dastardly
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Jun 29, 2004 |
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Despite being of a completely different nature than where my own interests lie, I find this to be the only story so far that keeps me giddy as to what will happen next. Excellent flow, sharp descriptions, and a universe that feels like it might really be there somewhere, things somehow come together in this tale vividly. (10/10)
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slave_george
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Jun 20, 2004 |
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The story is well done. I can't wait for the next chapter to come out. (10/10)
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mkemse
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Jun 8, 2004 |
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WOW (9/10)
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Blackdog
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Jun 6, 2004 |
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Well written. I really like it. Hope for more chapters. (10/10)
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melissa_luvsu
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Jun 6, 2004 |
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I have just read Mike's third chapter which I have been waiting for with my tongue hanging out, it sure did not dissapoint me. The build up to Amphora's whipping was sensational. The detail of the description is what all good writers strive for and what avid readers of this kind of yearn for. One rarley finds these slow build ups from male writers, its usually more "wham bam thank you mam!" in my view. I found this whole story to be highly erotic and the wait for chapter three has been so rewarding. I just can't wait for chapter four. I Guess this is also the sign of a good writer. Thank you so much for inspiring my fantasies on this subject, my weekend is now complete. (9/10)
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Polybios
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May 25, 2004 |
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Well, I did point out some weak points of the story in my first review, but this should not have misled the reader about the indisputable strength of the story – the well-built atmosphere, the narrative power and the gripping pace. So I change my rating to a 9 after having read the second chapter, since the author continues in the same vein. And, I should add, I reward it with only a 9 just to have one point left if the forthcoming chapters should provide even more excitement, which I'm quite sure they will.
A promising start, well written and with a fine flair for atmosphere. But as a fan (and author) of historical fiction, I have to agree with faibhar that the use of slangy expressions in a story like that is not only anachronistic, but also detracting from the reading pleasure. Another point which is a little out of place are some of the names – the name "Amphora", for example, as the heroine is called, might have a nice ring to it, but being translated by 'jug' or 'vessel', it sounds very odd to me. (On the other hand, the way how that name was revealed, as opposed to extracted, was an excellent move). Aside from these minor flaws, truly a fine debut. I look forward to reading the forthcoming chapters. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
M Coolham
(Edit) (May 16, 2004)
- Thanks very much for taking the time to review the first chapter of my first story. I value your comments about some of the dialogue and the way the characters use language. I had imagined that perhaps less than well-educated people might have spoken using slang, but I understand your point that it does not fit well with the historical setting of the story. I had debated whether to set the story in modern times or in the past. I chose the historical setting because some the scenes and scenarios to follow in later chapters would have been thoroughly unrealistic in a contemporary setting. I can, though, appreciate the clash as you have described it and I shall learn from this. And as for Amphora translating as 'jug' or 'vessel'.....I can imagine how that must grate on the ear for you. As a consequence of your remarks I have learnt to check my invented names for possible foreign meaning. Again, thanks for taking the time to write a review. MC
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boccaccio2000g
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May 24, 2004 |
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Great stuff! The author does a wonderful job of scene-setting, and, in chapter 2, seems to have overcome the minor flaws that others have pointed out. I can't remember when I've looked forward to further chapters with more enthusiasm. May there be many more! :-) I fervently hope that the author can maintain the high standard set in the first two. Continued success! (10/10)
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boccaccio2000g
(Edit) (Jun 6, 2004)
- June 6 Chapter Three did indeed live up to the promise of the first two, aside from a few minor errors; e.g "her hair flaying" and the anachronistic (IMO) "I'm way out of your league". But such minutiae aside, this author does a splendid job of building a 'thrill scene'. Wonderful stuff!
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triumvir
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May 16, 2004 |
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Well, I'm a fan of historical settings, too, and I can only repeat the previous reviews (as to both strong and weak points). A well written story, although the plotline isn't exactly original and could have been set in modern times, too, as the author has conceded in his replies to the previous posts. But I like it better this way, and the time the author spends on the general setting in this first chapter bodes well for those to follow. (9/10)
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VladPotemkin
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May 15, 2004 |
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Excellent first chapter. Powerful, beautiful female warrior in bondage -- great description and teasing development. I can only hope that she gets sexually tormented (not mutilated or physically wounded), just my preference. The only downside was her modern dialogue that throws the reader from the ancient setting. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
M Coolham
(Edit) (May 16, 2004)
- Thanks very much for taking the time to review the first chapter of my first story and for your kind words. Your comments are noted regarding the modern dialogue. I had debated whether to set this story in a contemporary or historical setting. I chose a contemporary setting because some of the scenes and scenarios to follow in later chapters would have seemed thoroughly unrealistic in a modern setting. Again, thanks for taking the time to review my story.
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e.e. norcod
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May 13, 2004 |
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Normally I would play coy and hold back the top ranking until the author has fullfilled the promise of this first chapter with a second. However, this is too well written to play such games. I have no doubt that the second chapter will be as good as the first. This certainly competes with the best of what I have read. (10/10)
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M Coolham
(Edit) (May 16, 2004)
- Thanks very much for taking the time to review the first chapter of my first story and for your very kind words. I hope that Chapter Two, "Paraded", meets your expectations. Again, thanks for taking the time to review my story. MC
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lex ludite
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May 13, 2004 |
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The author has done a very good job of setting the stage. Now the only question that remains is can he deliver? Looking forward to the meeting between the Amazon and the dungeon master. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
M Coolham
(Edit) (May 16, 2004)
- Thanks very much for taking the time to review the first chapter of my first story and for your kind words. I hope that Chapter Two, "Paraded", and ensuing chapters, allow you to consider that I have delivered. It is to meeting this goal that I work. Again, thanks for taking the time to review my story. MC
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| Reviewer:
LoKi Kat
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May 13, 2004 |
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I very much enjoy this whole scenario(perhaps from my Gor days). It was a very good read, though you need to continue! :) You left me wanting more. This is the type of story I would write but I am generally too lazy to actually write one with any substance. Anyway, I digress.
You wrote with very good spelling and punctuation. It was easy to read as far as paragraphing and such. :) (9/10)
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- Replied by:
M Coolham
(Edit) (May 16, 2004)
- Thanks very much for taking the time to review the first chapter of my first story and for your kind words. I hope that Chapter Two, "Paraded", and the ensuing chapters, also leave you wanting more. That is my aim! Again, thanks for taking the time to review my story. MC
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