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Chastity's Vacation with Mistress
Author: Mist
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(Added on May 6, 2004)
(This month 10724 readers) (Total 20515 readers) |
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Chastity, Mistress's lil subbie, is going on a nice vacation to a restort/casino. Here she experiences many spine tingling adventures. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (3.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (3/10) |
Highest
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Lowest
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Apr 17, 2005 |
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the story offers nothing at all (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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May 6, 2004 |
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The story seems to wander, as if written at different times when the author was in different moods. At first, it is dominant/submissive. Then it goes into a fantasy bit, followed by a standard bump and grind; it lacks a real story.
Did the author just want to get the story over with? They seem to have forgotten what paragraphs are at the end, and stopped abruptly. Yeah - a 5 is fitting. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
taraghost
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May 6, 2004 |
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The good news, it was short. Beyond that, this story is extemely poorly written. It is disjointed with absolutely no flow to it. The author needs to understand that spell check will only inform when a word is incorrect not when it is used out of context. A grammar utility and/or proofreader would prove to be a great help to this author. 'Mist' must also understand that writing (outside of technical manuals) requires the writer to paint a picture within the mind of the reader. I have writen storylines that are longer with more detail. The only reason I didn't give this 'story' a rating of one was my belief that english may not be the first language of the author. (2/10)
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