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Six Of The Best
Author: Alex H
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(Added on Apr 22, 2004)
(This month 13337 readers) (Total 23574 readers) |
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A young man, with no sexual experience, is hired by a girls' school and is asked to cane a pupil. Both he and the girl are very surprised by the experience. |
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| Reviewer:
Alex Bragi
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Apr 29, 2004 |
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It’s a good little story, only I felt it was kind of bogged down in a few places with details that seemed repeated and/or unnecessary. I think too Emily’s character could have been developed so much more, the reader is told so little about her. Let’s face it, a hot little thing like her is what most readers would be most interested in, everything from the colour of her sweet little pigtails, to whether or not her skirt covered her stocking tops, not to mention what kind of knickers she was wearing.
On the super nit picky side, always enter a space between the different character’s dialog, it just makes it easier to follow.
These are just my thoughts, other readers may disagree with me. I wish you well with your future writing.
(7/10)
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