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The Game
Author: Nadia
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(Added on Feb 6, 2004)
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It's a mostly true story of love and very hot s/m experience. A young woman missed her previous lover because her husband couldn't satisfy her need for dominant sex. So she called her ex and he agreed to come and see her one last time. *Not for people who like extreme stories. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
Rating:  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Mar 18, 2004 |
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"*Not for people who like extreme stories," the synopsis says. Well, I'm sorry to say this, but chapter one {as originaly submitted} is not for people who like coherent writing either. {edited mtl} Good luck on the subsequent chapters.<br>
Congratulations, Nadia -- Chapters 2 and 3 show occasional touches of genius!! /// Seriously, once you began taking your own writing more seriously, there was considerable improvement. Continued success!
{review edited 03/17/04} (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
bdsmbill
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Feb 10, 2004 |
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I think the previous reviewers underrated this story a bit. Yes, the author had a little trouble with sentence structure -- some of it looks like maybe English isn't her first language, but that's just a guess. I sense a really good story hiding here, and a writer who writes with passion but not experience. With practice she'll gain the experience, and the passion is more important, anyway. So, to the author I would say to hang in there and not be discouraged. You just need an editor to clean up the grammar a bit. (7/10)
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lex ludite
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Feb 9, 2004 |
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Yes there are quite a few run on or is it runaway sentences, but there is something honest about this little snippet. I get the feeling that the words just poured out and the author never thought to restir the brew she created. Please take these observations to heart, for I think that deep beneath this welter of words is perhaps a very good story trying to get out. (5/10)
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