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Busted
Author: slave barry
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(Added on Feb 1, 2004)
(This month 20705 readers) (Total 45300 readers) |
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Maid slave self-induces an unearned orgasm and pays the price. This story is a work in art and will have chapters added in the future. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
Rating:  (6.5/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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Feb 5, 2004 |
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slave barry hypes up the reader for one heck of a punishment session and then “leaves this part to the readers imagination”? What an anti-climatic let-down! Many of the scenes of bondage were also glossed over. I think that shorter paragraphs and using the past tense of verbs would also make for easier reading.
Not to be totally critical, I did enjoy the varied bondage positions and taking in Amy as a dom-in-training.
(7/10)
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| Reviewer:
trainmanretep
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Feb 1, 2004 |
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an average story. Concept is intersting, especially bringing the maid into the picture. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
bdsmbill
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Feb 1, 2004 |
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Pretty good story, with one major disappointment. You checked the story code for CBT, but when you got to that part, you put in a quick line about leaving it to the reader's imagination. If you are uncomfortable writing CBT scenes, I would suggest that you write stories that don't include them. (6/10)
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