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The Nerd
Author: The Outsider
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(Added on Oct 21, 2003)
(This month 11591 readers) (Total 22166 readers) |
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Young nerd enslaves an Amazon woman who used to pick on her with the help of her sister, and look as the cards helping her. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (3/10) |
Average
Rating:  (2.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
littleslut
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Aug 3, 2004 |
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needs serious reworking (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Aug 1, 2004 |
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it is in serious need of editing, grammar and alot of other work needed,
has promise, but you might want to consider either rewriting or at least editing it (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
jbowler65
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Oct 24, 2003 |
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Disappointing. The story had some promise, but is in need of some major rework/editing. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
bdsmbill
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Oct 23, 2003 |
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Sorry, but this isn't too good. The premise is OK, but the writing isn't. (2/10)
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e.e. norcod
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Oct 23, 2003 |
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The numerical score says it all. Poorly written. Couture, that's what you were trying to say. The author needs to sit down and work with an English teacher on basic writing skills. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
S_Couture
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Oct 22, 2003 |
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I think someone could take this and probably make a good story out of it. I don't want to give a really savvier review here, but the story needs editing . . . *a lot of editing*.
There are some great kinky ideas in here, but they are wasted.
(3/10)
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