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Hands On The Clock
Author: Frances LaGatta
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(Added on Mar 17, 2003)
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When his wild and sassy wife gets a little too frisky in bed (the knife was really TOO much), Gabe has no choice but to give the naughty nymph the wake up call of her life! |
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| Reviewer:
Mermaid Master
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Dec 25, 2005 |
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Very well done and interesting story. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Mar 20, 2003 |
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The plot line is pretty basic, what isn't these days? The dialogue could have benefited from tighter editing and a reduction in the density of adjectives, but no one is perfect either. I had a major problem with the reaction of Gabe to what seemed to be a very exciting bout of fantasy playing. To me the ending was not in keeping with the character of either of them, a serious problem. On balance the author certainly displays talent for writing and I certainly would be interested in reading more of her work. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Frances LaGatta
(Edit) (Sep 17, 2003)
- Thanks so much for the feedback. It is always helpful. <br>On Gabe's motivation? He absolutely adored his wife's fantasy bedroom play! But in hindsight, he realized she had used her sexual prowess to difuse his anger & avoid a confrontation with him. Her headplay with the knife was Fem Dom and at odds with the maid's get-up no? But to quote Gabe; “This will remind you that you will never again resort to sexual manipulation in order to finagle your way out of future punishments. And starting today? There WILL be further punishments whenever you either lie, misbehave, or disobey me.” So in the end, the D/s roles reversed & Gabe showed Bobbino who wore the pants. Sure hope I didn't fall short here!
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