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Sins of the Father
Author: Kallie Thomas
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(Added on Dec 30, 2002)
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A girl and her two sisters fall victim to their father's ex-partner and his twisted need for revenge. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
agp_millie
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Dec 19, 2004 |
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Kallie You have a way with words and as an occasional Proof-reader, I find you faultless. Nothing that detracts from the vivid image you create. ... Thankyou, for all 41 of your stories. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
CoffinNail
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Dec 31, 2002 |
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Excellent story, terrific pacing and descriptions. Particluarly fond of the ending--nice way of showing that the treatment of the girls was absolutely not typical in the training of women.
--CN (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Kallie Thomas
(Edit) (Jan 1, 2003)
- Unfortunately, it seems that no matter how many times I proof something, I wind up with a mistake or two slipping through. I appreciate the kind review, but there is a glaring error in editing hiding out in this one--trying to decide if I should resubmit :-(
Kallie
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| Reviewer:
Nitrofox
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Dec 31, 2002 |
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Oh come now. We hardly find out anything about the victims, except that Nina's hair is black. The motive of the kidnappers is never explained, and the motive of shooting into the crowd at the restaurant is also silly. Why shoot at those people? If the motive was just to get the girls, then it's pointless. Oh well. I think this story could use some major improvement. (4/10)
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- Replied by:
CoffinNail
(Edit) (Dec 31, 2002)
- You have GOT to be kidding! The motive is never explained? It is referred to repeatedly! Why shoot into the crowd? Because the guy is an obsessed loon looking to totally destroy their father! I think your reviewing skills could use some major improvement--or perhaps you should rate according to the writing rather than according to the storylines you prefer.
--CN
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